求帮忙看下这篇文章有没有语法错,急用!Dear teachers and students ,good evening Myname is Li Simeng ,the toastmaster of this party tonight .Its very glad to meetall of you in this beautiful season .Obviously the year of 2013 is special

求帮忙看下这篇文章有没有语法错,急用!Dear teachers and students ,good evening Myname is Li Simeng ,the toastmaster of this party tonight .Its very glad to meetall of you in this beautiful season .Obviously the year of 2013 is special
求帮忙看下这篇文章有没有语法错,急用!
Dear teachers and students ,good evening Myname is Li Simeng ,the toastmaster of this party tonight .Its very glad to meetall of you in this beautiful season .Obviously the year of 2013 is special to mostof you here .Because in this year we experienced the college entranceexamination ,and we get into college which means the new the step in our life.Time goes by ,after the military training ,autumn is close to us .At thisgolden September ,we get together in this beautiful school and tonight will bereally different .At the next time we will see the brilliant performs by eachinstitutes students.
Come everybody ,put down your stress andenjoy this party .Tonight belong with us.

求帮忙看下这篇文章有没有语法错,急用!Dear teachers and students ,good evening Myname is Li Simeng ,the toastmaster of this party tonight .Its very glad to meetall of you in this beautiful season .Obviously the year of 2013 is special
Dear teachers and students ,good evening !Myname is Li Simeng ,the toastmaster of this party tonight .Its （改成I‘m更好） very glad to meet all of you in this beautiful season .Obviously the year of 2013 is special to most of you here .Because in this year we experienced the college entrance examination ,and we get（此句前后时态一致,改成got） into college which means the（the改成a） new the(去掉the) step in our life（用复数lives）.Time goes by ,after the military training ,autumn is close to us (这句改成As time goes by,autumn is approaching,and the military traning is coming to an end.).At （改成in,在月份前）this golden September ,we get together in this beautiful school and tonight will bereally （这个词拼写错了吧?）different .At the next time we will see the brilliant performs by eachinstitutes students.（改成Next,let's enjoy the brilliant performances made by every institutes' students.）
这是我仔细帮你稍微改了下,总体还是可以的,但是宴会主持应该口语化些,拉近与听众的距离,所以稍微改动了下,简单,清楚,

Good evening teachers and students,
My name is Simeng, the toastmaster of the party tonight.
It is glad to meet all of you in this beautiful season. Obviously the year of 2013 is spe...

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Good evening teachers and students,
My name is Simeng, the toastmaster of the party tonight.
It is glad to meet all of you in this beautiful season. Obviously the year of 2013 is special to most of you here .Because in this year we have been through the college entranceexamination , andgetting into college means starting a new journy in our life.
After the military training ,autumn is coming.
In this golden September , we get together in this beautiful school and tonight will bereally different (请问这句想表达什么？）Now, let us enjoy the brilliant performs.
Come on everybody ,get wild and join the party.

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