这篇英语作文大概可以多少分啊?（满分二十五）书面表达.根据下面提示,以Healthy Diet为题写一篇100词左右的短文.提示：1.健康饮食的重要性.(1) 有助于保持健康与正常体重； (2) 有助于保持体

这篇英语作文大概可以多少分啊?（满分二十五）书面表达.根据下面提示,以Healthy Diet为题写一篇100词左右的短文.提示：1.健康饮食的重要性.(1) 有助于保持健康与正常体重； (2) 有助于保持体
这篇英语作文大概可以多少分啊?（满分二十五）
书面表达.
根据下面提示,以Healthy Diet为题写一篇100词左右的短文.
提示：
1.健康饮食的重要性.
(1) 有助于保持健康与正常体重；
(2) 有助于保持体力,精力充沛地进行学习与劳动；
(3) 有助于提高生活质量.
2.什么是健康饮食?
(1) 合理的饮食结构；
(2) 绿色蔬菜与水果；
(3) 愉快的心情、适量的体育锻炼与健康的饮食同等重要.
Healthy Diet
As far as we know,a healthy diet is one way to lkeep healthy,which is important.
Should you ask why,I think it is easy for you to understand.A healthy diet can help you keep fit and normal weight,be good for the power of your body ,and learn or do work energeticly.All the same,it can improve your quality of life,and so on.
Meanwhile.what is a healthy?In my opinion,a healthy diet is that has a balanced principle.And through it,it is obvious that green vegetables and fruit are good a lot.Keep a good feeling!Suitable exercise is the same importance as a healthy diet!
In a word,more hardly as your doing,you will be healthy more!
楼主只是一个高一的学生,如果有语法错误请指出.
第一句是keep,不是lkeep

这篇英语作文大概可以多少分啊?（满分二十五）书面表达.根据下面提示,以Healthy Diet为题写一篇100词左右的短文.提示：1.健康饮食的重要性.(1) 有助于保持健康与正常体重； (2) 有助于保持体
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评语： 句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色；作者词汇表达比较多样,也能较好的使用一些学术词汇；层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词.
1 Healthy Diet As far as we know, a healthy diet is one way to lkeep healthy, which is important. [教师点评]
[拼写错误] lkeep 拼写错误,可替换选项为：keep, Jeep, jeep
[学习提示] 易混词汇: food, provisions, diet 都有“食物”之意.
food: 普通常用词,泛指一切能充饥和补充人或动物身体消耗的食物.
provisions: 指即时应用或储藏备用的食物或粮食.
diet: 指规定的或惯常的食物,尤指维持健康的定量或定质食物,也指疗养时规定的食物.
[高分词汇] important的近义表达有 crucial/essential.
crucial: extremely important/critical:
It is crucial that the report should be on time
essential: (something) very important/indispensable:
It is essential that you should take out a proper insurance.
It is essential for the applicant to wear a dark suit.
[批改提示] know近义表达有cognize/ recognize/ realize/ foreknow
2.2 Should you ask why, I think it is easy for you to understand. [教师点评]
[学习提示] 易混词汇: ask, beg, demand, require, request, implore, claim, pray, entreat 均有“要求,请求”之意.
ask: 最普通用词,指向对方提出要求或请求,长、晚辈,上下级之间都可使用.
beg: 指恳切地或再三地请求或要求,常含低三下四意味,也多用于应酬场合.
demand: 一般指理直气壮地提出强烈要求,或坚持不让对方拒绝的要求.
require: 强调根据事业、需要或纪律、法律等而提出的要求.
request: 正式用词,指非常正式,有礼貌的请求或恳求,多含担心因种种原因对方不能答应的意味.
implore: 书面用词,着重指迫切、焦急或痛苦地恳求或哀求,常含较强的感情色彩.
claim: 指有权或宣称有权得到而公开提出的要求.
pray: 语气庄重,指热情、诚恳和敬祈的要求,现不很常用.
entreat: 泛指一般“恳求或哀求”,含企图说服对方或用热烈的请求软化反对意见的意味.
[批改提示] understand的近义表达有appreciate.
2.3 A healthy diet can help you keep fit and normal weight, be good for the power of your body , and learn or do work energeticly. [教师点评]
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查
[拼写错误] energeticly 拼写错误,可替换选项为：energetically, energetic, energetics
[学习提示] 易混词汇: food, provisions, diet 都有“食物”之意.
food: 普通常用词,泛指一切能充饥和补充人或动物身体消耗的食物.
provisions: 指即时应用或储藏备用的食物或粮食.
diet: 指规定的或惯常的食物,尤指维持健康的定量或定质食物,也指疗养时规定的食物.
[批改提示] keep近义表达有hold/ maintain/ preserve/ sustain
[批改提示] help近义表达有support/ assist/ aid
2.4 All the same, it can improve your quality of life, and so on. [教师点评]
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 improve...quality_of_life 在教材中出现过 627 次
SeeAlso: better quality_of_life12,better quality_of_life12
[学习提示] 易混词汇: improve, better, perfect, refine 均有“改进,改善”之意.
improve: 最常用词,多指状态或性质上的深刻或重要改进,也可指自身能力的提高.
better: 多用于口语,指适当地改善原来并非很差的状态或性质,也指社会地位、经济状况的改善.
perfect: 语义强,通常指使方法、技术等达到完善美好的境地.
refine: 侧重指使语言、仪态等变得文雅、优美,也可指技艺等的提高.
3.5 Meanwhile. [教师点评]
3.6 what is a healthy? [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[学习提示] 易混词汇: healthy, healthful, wholesome 均含有“有益于健康的”之意.
healthy: 与healthful都可表示“有益于健康的”,但healthy只在非正式文体中可与healthful换用.
healthful: 比healthy更常用.
wholesome: 常可与healthful互换并且更常用,更强调有益于、增进、促使、维持身体或精神的健康.
3.7 In my opinion, a healthy diet is that has a balanced principle. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查!
[低频警示] balanced...principle 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[低频警示] a balanced principle 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 have...principle 在教材中出现过 178 次
SeeAlso: have rule1952,accept principle160,have rationale109,take principle48
[学习提示] 易混词汇: food, provisions, diet 都有“食物”之意.
food: 普通常用词,泛指一切能充饥和补充人或动物身体消耗的食物.
provisions: 指即时应用或储藏备用的食物或粮食.
diet: 指规定的或惯常的食物,尤指维持健康的定量或定质食物,也指疗养时规定的食物.
3.8 And through it, it is obvious that green vegetables and fruit are good a lot. [教师点评]
[批改提示] 查看and用于句首的用法.
[批改提示] obvious的近义表达有conspicuous .
[高分句型] it is obvious that的意思是很明显,是四六级经典句型.
It is obvious that people should have adequate rest in order to work hard .
很显然,人们应该充分休息以便于更努力地工作.
[批改提示] through的近义表达有across,in term of,via.
3.9 Keep a good feeling! [教师点评]
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 keep...feeling 在教材中出现过 175 次
SeeAlso: keep opinion66,keep belief28,keep notion18,keep impression7
[学习提示] 易混词汇: emotion, feeling, passion, affection, sentiment 的共同含义是“感情,情感”之意.
emotion: 普通用词,词义中性.泛指因外界刺激而引起思想情感从细微变化到最强烈的发作.
feeling: 普通用词,含义广.多指具体的或内心的感受,或表露出来的强烈情感.
passion: 指极强烈的感情、尤指愤怒、爱好等.也常指两性间的爱情.
affection: 指对人的爱慕或深厚、温柔的感情.
sentiment: 一般指由一种思想激起的感情,含较大的理智因素.
[批改提示] keep近义表达有hold/ maintain/ preserve/ sustain
3.10 Suitable exercise is the same importance as a healthy diet! [教师点评]
[低频警示] suitable...exercise 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: food, provisions, diet 都有“食物”之意.
food: 普通常用词,泛指一切能充饥和补充人或动物身体消耗的食物.
provisions: 指即时应用或储藏备用的食物或粮食.
diet: 指规定的或惯常的食物,尤指维持健康的定量或定质食物,也指疗养时规定的食物.
[批改提示] suitable的近义表达有appropriate.
4.11 In a word, more hardly as your doing, you will be healthy more! [教师点评]
[语法检查] 建议把 your doing 改成 you're doing (Did you mean...)
[形容词错误] 语法错误,hardly没有比较级形式.
英语中,有些形容词和副词没有比较等级,这主要是由于本身词义的缘故,在语义上不存在差别,这类词可称为不可分级形容词或副词.主要有下列几类：点击查看.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: hardly, scarcely, barely 均含“几乎不”之意.
hardly表示“几乎不”; hard用作副词,表示“努力,用力”.
hardly: 指接近最低限度,差不多没有多余,强调困难和程度.
scarcely: 指不太充分,不太够,不足,不能令人满意,强调数量.
barely: 指仅仅够,一点不多,强调没有多余.