英文段落修改,一段话,高手帮忙修改一下（包括语法句式）,A country or region’s animal husbandry is usually measured by grassland animal husbandry development.The grassland animal husbandry value in western developed countries a

英文段落修改,一段话,高手帮忙修改一下（包括语法句式）,A country or region’s animal husbandry is usually measured by grassland animal husbandry development.The grassland animal husbandry value in western developed countries a
英文段落修改,一段话,高手帮忙修改一下（包括语法句式）,
A country or region’s animal husbandry is usually measured by grassland animal husbandry development.The grassland animal husbandry value in western developed countries accounts for 60% of the total animal husbandry production value,but the proportion is only 12% in China.Meanwhile,the developed countries’ experiences have indicated that grassland animal husbandry is the direction for animal husbandry development,which will become China’s significant growth point in husbandry economics.Forage grass is the important material foundation of grassland animal husbandry production,and has the advantages in terms of high nutritional value,good palatability and low land requirement when compared to traditional food crops.Therefore,developing the forage grass industry is very important to promote China’s husbandry industry and fundamentally solve the contradiction about man and livestock’s fight for grain.At present,our country’s natural grassland degenerates severely,and artificial grassland construction is insufficient,so high-grade forages are generally in short supply.In 2012,the No.1 documentation of CPC central committee has emphasized:supporting the standard beef cattle and sheep breeding in some large-scale base counties and the original species breeding farms construction,carrying out dairy alfalfa development plans,besides,promoting pig and dairy cattle breeding area construction.The fast development of animal husbandry will increase forage demand substantially and make the shortage of forage grass sharpens.

英文段落修改,一段话,高手帮忙修改一下（包括语法句式）,A country or region’s animal husbandry is usually measured by grassland animal husbandry development.The grassland animal husbandry value in western developed countries a
※ A country or region’s animal husbandry is usually measured by grassland animal husbandry development.
* 改为 A country’s or region’s a animal husbandry,这是由于这样说等于 A country’s animal husbandry or a region’s animal husbandry（一个国家的畜牧业或一个地区的畜牧业）的紧缩,故此 country’s和 region’s 都得用表示属性的所有格,而且前面都需要加不定冠词.
* by grassland animal husbandry development最好用according as how its grassland animal husbandry develops（依据其草原畜牧业发展的程度【来衡量】）
※ The grassland animal husbandry value in western developed countries accounts for 60% of the total animal husbandry production value, but the proportion is only 12% in China.
* The grassland animal husbandry value 改为 The value of the grassland animal husbandry
* the total animal husbandry production value 相应地改为 the total output value of the animal husbandry
* but the proportion is only 12% in China 改为 while such a proportion in China is only 12% （in China 作 proportion 的定语）
※ Meanwhile, the developed countries’ experiences have indicated that grassland animal husbandry is the direction for animal husbandry development, which will become China’s significant growth point in husbandry economics.
* the developed countries' experiences 改为 the experiences from the developed countries
* direction 指方位路线方面的方向,改为表示倾向性方向的 orientation
* in the husbandry economics 意思是在牧业经济学中,改为 in the husbandry economy（在牧业经济中）
※ Forage grass is the important material foundation of grassland animal husbandry production, and has the advantages in terms of high nutritional value, good palatability and low land requirement when compared to traditional food crops.
* 第二个并列谓语部分距离主语较远,最好用it重复主语,改为and it has the advantages …
* low land requirement改为low quantity demanded for land（demanded for land【对土地需求的】是过去分词短语作后置定语）
* compared to 表示“被比作”,改为compared with（与…相比较）.
※ Therefore, developing the forage grass industry is very important to promote China’s husbandry industry and fundamentally solve the contradiction about man and livestock’s fight for grain.
* developing the forage grass industry is very important to promote China's husbandry industry and fundamentally solve the contradiction 改为 It is very important to develop the forage grass industry to promote China's husbandry industry and fundamentally solve the contradiction
* the contradiction about man and livestock’s fight for grain. 改为 the contradiction that man and livestock strive for grain between each other（that man and livestock strive for grain between each other是 the contradiction 的同位语从句）
※ At present, our country's natural grassland degenerates severely, and artificial grassland construction is insufficient, so high-grade forages are generally in short supply.
* 人造草原用 artificial grassland 似乎不妥,可否改为 man-made grassland 或者 cultivated grassland.
※ In 2012, the No.1 documentation of CPC central committee has emphasized: supporting the standard beef cattle and sheep breeding in some large-scale base counties and the original species breeding farms construction, carrying out dairy alfalfa development plans, besides, promoting pig and dairy cattle breeding area construction.
* In 2012, the No.1 documentation of CPC central committee emphasizes （文件中的内容用完成时态不妥,改为一般现在时）
* emphasize 后面带有文件中规定的三个内容,分别用动名词宾语并列,由于每个宾语都较长,可以用分号,即 emphasizes: supporting…；carrying out …；and promoting
* beef cattle and sheep 是被饲养的,即s support sth. to be done,因此需要改为 supporting the standard beef cattle and sheep bred in some large-scale base counties,
* 圈养用 feed in a pen,改为and the original species bred in pens
※ The fast development of animal husbandry will increase forage demand substantially and make the shortage of forage grass sharpens.
* fast development改为rapid development
全文修改如下：
A country's or a region's animal husbandry is usually measured according as how its grassland animal husbandry develops. The value of the grassland animal husbandry in western developed countries accounts for 60% of the total output value of that, while such a proportion in China is only 12%. Meanwhile, the experiences from the developed countries have indicated that grassland animal husbandry is the orientation for animal husbandry development, which will become China's significant point of growth in husbandry economy. Forage grass is the important material foundation of grassland animal husbandry production, and it has the advantages in terms of high nutritional value, good palatability and low quantity demanded for land when compared with traditional food crops. Therefore, it is very important to develop the forage grass industry to promote China's husbandry industry and fundamentally solve the contradiction that man and livestock strive for grain between each other. At present, our country's natural grassland degenerates severely, while man-made cultivated grassland is insufficient, so high-grade forages are generally in short supply. In 2012, the No.1 documentation of CPC central committee has emphasized: supporting the standard beef cattle and sheep bred in some large-scale base counties and the original species bred in pens; carrying out dairy alfalfa development plans; and besides, promoting pig and dairy cattle breeding area construction. The rapid development of animal husbandry will increase forage demand substantially and make the shortage of forage grass sharpens.

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A country or region’s animal husbandry is usually measured by grassland animal husbandry development. The grassland animal husbandry value in western developed countries accounts for 60% of the total animal husbandry production value, but the proportion is only 12% in China. Meanwhile, the developed countries’ experiences have indicated that grassland animal husbandry is the direction for animal husbandry development, which will become China’s significant growth point in husbandry economics. Forage grass is the important material foundation of grassland animal husbandry production, and has the advantages in terms of high nutritional value, good palatability and low land requirement when compared to traditional food crops. Therefore, developing the forage grass industry is very important to promote China’s husbandry industry and fundamentally solve the contradiction about man and livestock’s fight for grain. At present, our country’s natural grassland degenerates severely, and artificial grassland construction is insufficient, so high-grade forages are generally in short supply. In 2012, the No.1 documentation of CPC central committee has emphasized: supporting the standard beef cattle and sheep breeding in some large-scale base counties and the original species breeding farms construction, carrying out dairy alfalfa development plans, besides, promoting pig and dairy cattle breeding area construction. The fast development of animal husbandry will increase forage demand substantially and make the shortage of forage grass sharpens.

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