COOPERATION 这篇文章有没有语法错误,请帮改之One person is still a person .but two people are a team.Ateam can do everything that seems impossible .To succeed in life .We must iearn the spirit of cooperation .First of all .We can catch h

COOPERATION 这篇文章有没有语法错误,请帮改之One person is still a person .but two people are a team.Ateam can do everything that seems impossible .To succeed in life .We must iearn the spirit of cooperation .First of all .We can catch h
COOPERATION 这篇文章有没有语法错误,请帮改之
One person is still a person .but two people are a team.A
team can do everything that seems impossible .To succeed in life .We must iearn the spirit of cooperation .
First of all .We can catch happiness,relatians and friendship if we pull together .Cooperation makes people set aside their differences and work together .Second .as the famous proverb goes ,“Many hands make light work”.The power of only one person is very small ,but the power of lots people is strong enough to overcome any difficutly .Thild.It is easier to be suceessful.Good cooperation can make us work faster and better.
As we can see the the above,how necessery to be cooperation!As a saying goes ,One tree can not make a forest ,one flower can not make a spring But the most important means showing love for others It is love that turns the earth
这篇文章有没有语法错误,请帮改之

COOPERATION 这篇文章有没有语法错误,请帮改之One person is still a person .but two people are a team.Ateam can do everything that seems impossible .To succeed in life .We must iearn the spirit of cooperation .First of all .We can catch h
我觉得问题不少.
是Toefl的作文吗?
One person is still a person,but two can make up a team.
A team can do anything that seems impossible.
To succeed in life,we must learn the spirit of cooperation.
First of all,we can catch happiness,relatians and friendship if we ____(你用pull together想说什么意思?用法不对)
Cooperation makes people set aside their differences and turn to work together.
Secondly,as the famous proverb goes,“many hands make light work”.
The power of only one person is very small,but the power of lots people is strong enough to overcome any difficutly.
Thildly,it is easier to be suceessful.
Good cooperation can make us work faster and better.(Why?You should talk into this sub-point,as far as I'm concerned)
As we can see,from the above,how necessery it is for us to be cooperative!
As a saying goes ,("one tree can not make a forest ,one flower can not make a spring.But the most important means showing love for others It is love that turns the earth ')别old saying goes了,上面已经用过这种写作手法了,重复

没太多的错
One person is still a person .but two people are a team.A
team can do everything that seems impossible .To succeed in life .We must iearn the spirit of cooperation .
First of all ....

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One person is still a person .but two people are a team.A
team can do everything that seems impossible .To succeed in life .We must iearn the spirit of cooperation .
First of all .We can catch happiness，relatians and friendship if we pull together .Cooperation makes people set aside their differences and work together .Second .as the famous proverb goes ，“Many hands make light work”.The power of only one person is very small ，but the power of lots of people is strong enough to overcome any difficuty .Third.It is easier to be suceessful.Good cooperation can make us work faster and better.
As we can see the above，how necessery to be cooperation！As a saying goes ，One tree can not make a forest ，one flower can not make a spring But the most important means showing love for others It is love that turns the earth

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比起语法错误,这篇文章还有好多问题.作为立论的文章,它缺乏论据.作者给了3个分论点,可是却没有证据去证明它们.
"As a saying goes ，One tree can not make a forest ，one flower can not make a spring"这句不是英文谚语吧?
"But the most important means showing lo...

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比起语法错误,这篇文章还有好多问题.作为立论的文章,它缺乏论据.作者给了3个分论点,可是却没有证据去证明它们.
"As a saying goes ，One tree can not make a forest ，one flower can not make a spring"这句不是英文谚语吧?
"But the most important means showing love for others It is love that turns the earth "这跟cooperation有啥关系?
最后说一句,标点符号很重要.不知道是不是因为拈贴过来的缘故,第一段的标点看起来都是句号,很可怕呀.

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