英语作文订正,求大神,不要改变句型啊...i like animals very much . such cat ,dog monkey.but snake is my best.so on sunday.i ask my father that i want feed a snake ,but he don't agree with me . he think the snake is dangers animal,i tell

英语作文订正,求大神,不要改变句型啊...i like animals very much . such cat ,dog monkey.but snake is my best.so on sunday.i ask my father that i want feed a snake ,but he don't agree with me . he think the snake is dangers animal,i tell
英语作文订正,求大神,不要改变句型啊...
i like animals very much . such cat ,dog monkey.but snake is my best.so on sunday.i ask my father that i want feed a snake ,but he don't agree with me . he think the snake is dangers animal,i tell he that most snake very safely.in the end ,he said:"if you get a good grade in the next monthly examination,I'll buy a snake for you" I'm very surprise,but i feel stress,too.
the day ,i ask friend the new,she feeling very strange.because she think most girl are afraid with snakes. anyway,I'll study hard ,because i want get the snake.

英语作文订正,求大神,不要改变句型啊...i like animals very much . such cat ,dog monkey.but snake is my best.so on sunday.i ask my father that i want feed a snake ,but he don't agree with me . he think the snake is dangers animal,i tell
I like animals very much,such as cat,dog,money,but snake is my favorite.Therefore,i ask my father that i would like to feed a snake as my pet,which meets with his strong opposition.He argues that a snake is a dangerous animal so that it may hurt you .I don t think so because most of the snakes are friends to human and act safely Well,under the persistent perusation for my father,he ends up with agreeing with my idea whereas sets a strict condition for that,that is ,he doesn t buy one for me until i get a high mark in the next month's examination.On hearing his words ,suprise and stress are meanwhile pouring into my throat,Yes ,i need to study hard in order to fulfill my dream.
The next day when i meet with one of my good friends ,she cant help but feel like being strange after having heard what i said with my father,in her point of view,the large part of girls actually are afraid of such frieghtening animals like snakes .Maybe i am an expection,i think,well ,i do put all my efforts to study for the purpose of my lovely little snake.
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Such 表示例举时不能直接和名词连用，搭配是：such as 根据你的文意，应该等同与for example.
monkey 后面你用了句号，但but没有大写，而且but snake is my best句型有歧义，需要交代清楚，
不好意思啊，改不下去了，i ask my father that i want feed a snake 这句型......！建议你整篇都修改吧，我改...

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Such 表示例举时不能直接和名词连用，搭配是：such as 根据你的文意，应该等同与for example.
monkey 后面你用了句号，但but没有大写，而且but snake is my best句型有歧义，需要交代清楚，
不好意思啊，改不下去了，i ask my father that i want feed a snake 这句型......！建议你整篇都修改吧，我改就等于重新写给你了。
英语作文不需要用复杂的句型和意思很大的单词，只要交代清楚事情，符合文法，语法正确就可以了，建议你不要用汉语的习惯来写英文作文？

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i like animals very much . such as cats ,dogs and monkeys.but snakes are my favourite.so on sunday.i told my father that i wanted to feed a snake ,but he didn't agree with me . he thought snakes are d...

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i like animals very much . such as cats ,dogs and monkeys.but snakes are my favourite.so on sunday.i told my father that i wanted to feed a snake ,but he didn't agree with me . he thought snakes are dangerous animals,i told him that most of snakes were very safety.in the end ,he said:"if you get a good grade in the next monthly examination,I'll buy a snake for you" I was very surprise,but i felt stress,too.
that day ,i told a friend about the thing,she felt very strange.because she thought most girls are afraid of snakes. anyway,I'll study hard ,because i want to get the snake.

同学，时态要注意啊。应该用一般过去时吧。还有，句首字母大写就不给你改了。。

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i like animals very much, such cat, dog, and monkey. However, snake is my favorite. Last sunday, i asked my father that If i can raise a snake. Unfortunately, he didn't agree with me. He thinks snak...

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i like animals very much, such cat, dog, and monkey. However, snake is my favorite. Last sunday, i asked my father that If i can raise a snake. Unfortunately, he didn't agree with me. He thinks snakes are dangers. I convinced him with telling him that most of the snakes are very safe. In the end, he said:"if you get a good grade in the next monthly examination, I'll buy a snake for you." I was very surprised ,but i feel the stress, too.
On the same day, i asked a new friend about it. She had a very strange feeling, because she thought that most girls are afraid of snakes. Anyway, I'll study hard in order to get the snake.

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I like animals very much . Such as cat ,dog and monkey.But I like snake the best.So on last sunday,I asked my father if I could feed a snake ,but he didn't agree with me . he thought snake is danger...

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I like animals very much . Such as cat ,dog and monkey.But I like snake the best.So on last sunday,I asked my father if I could feed a snake ,but he didn't agree with me . he thought snake is dangerous animal,I told him that most snakes are very safe.In the end ,he said:"if you get a good grade in the next monthly examination,I'll buy a snake for you" I'm very surprise,but I feel stress,too.
The next day ,I told my friend the news,she felt very strange.because she thought most girls are afraid of snakes. Anyway,I'll study hard ,because I want to get a snake.

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I like animals very much . such as cats ,dogs and monkeys.But the snake is my favorite.Last sunday,Ii told my father that I wanted to feed a snake ,but he didn't agree with me . he thought the sna...

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I like animals very much . such as cats ,dogs and monkeys.But the snake is my favorite.Last sunday,Ii told my father that I wanted to feed a snake ,but he didn't agree with me . he thought the snake was a dangerous animal.I told him that most snakes are harmless.In the end ,he said:"if you get a good grade in the next monthly examination,I'll buy a snake for you" I felt very surprised at it as well as stressed.
Just that day ,I told my friend that thing,but she felt very strange.Because she thought that most girls are afraid with snakes. Anyway,I'll study harder ,because I want to get a snake.
一、I（我）大写的问题
二、动物名词要么复数，要么前面加冠词的问题
三、过去式现在式混用的问题
四、名词形容词化（suprise，stress）的问题
五、整体写的还是不错的

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