帮我修改一下这篇作文,英语作文.My favorite hobby is music.There are plenty of music files in my computer.I stored them in different folders and personalised the folders with different names.For example,Jazz,LadyGAGA,Symphony,and so on.Mu

帮我修改一下这篇作文,英语作文.My favorite hobby is music.There are plenty of music files in my computer.I stored them in different folders and personalised the folders with different names.For example,Jazz,LadyGAGA,Symphony,and so on.Mu
帮我修改一下这篇作文,英语作文.
My favorite hobby is music.There are plenty of music files in my computer.I stored them in different folders and personalised the folders with different names.For example,Jazz,LadyGAGA,Symphony,and so on.
Music plays a positive role in my everyday life.When I felt unhappy,I can chat with my friend or just going around while the perfect way is turning on the Mp3!Music would cheer me up again!
All in all,I love music,and I can't live without music!

帮我修改一下这篇作文,英语作文.My favorite hobby is music.There are plenty of music files in my computer.I stored them in different folders and personalised the folders with different names.For example,Jazz,LadyGAGA,Symphony,and so on.Mu
My favorite hobby is listening to music.( what i loved most is music.)There are plenty of music files in my computer.I stored them in different folders and personalised the folders with different names.For example,Jazz,LadyGAGA,Symphony,and so on.
Music plays a positive role in my everyday life.When I felt upset（沮丧）,I can chat with my friends（复数比较好） or just go (go 和chat是并列的,都在can后,都用原型） around while the perfect way is turning on the Mp3（这句话没看懂,你想表达什么呢?如果你想说听着音乐走走可以说,or just go around with the music encouraging me)!Music always( always 比would要好一些,它表状态,和持续性） cheer me up !
All in all,I love music and（and这里前面无需加逗号） I can't live without it（前面刚提过music,避免重复,用it）!

My favorite hobby is music. There are plenty of music files on my computer. I stored them in different folders and personalised the folders with different names. For example, Jazz, LadyGAGA, Symphony,...

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My favorite hobby is music. There are plenty of music files on my computer. I stored them in different folders and personalised the folders with different names. For example, Jazz, LadyGAGA, Symphony, and so on. Music plays a decisive role in my everyday life. When I felt unhappy, I can chat with my friend or just going around while the perfect way is turning on the Mp3! Music would cheer me up again! All in all, I love music, and I can't live without music!

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My favorite hobby is music. There are plenty of music files in my computer. I stored them in different folders and personalised the folders with different names. For example, Jazz, LadyGAGA, Symphony,...

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My favorite hobby is music. There are plenty of music files in my computer. I stored them in different folders and personalised the folders with different names. For example, Jazz, LadyGAGA, Symphony, and so on.
Music plays a positive role in my everyday life. When I felt unhappy, I can chat with my friend or just going around while the perfect way is turning on the Mp3! Music would cheer me up again!
All in all, I love music, and I can't live without music!
既然是你自己的，没什么好改的，不错

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My favorite hobby is to listen to music. There are plenty of musical files in my computer. I store them in different folders with different names, such as Jazz, Lady GAGA, Symphony and the like.
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My favorite hobby is to listen to music. There are plenty of musical files in my computer. I store them in different folders with different names, such as Jazz, Lady GAGA, Symphony and the like.
Music plays a positive role in my daily life. When I feel unhappy, I can either chat with my friend or just have a walk. But the best way for me to get rid of the bad feeling is to listen to the music, because music always cheer me up again.
All in all, I love music, and I can't live without music.
(英语作文要注意时态一致哦。我作文也有类似的问题。仅供参考！）

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I have a lot of different hobby, and my favorite one is listening to music. There are plenty of music files in my computer folders. I will store them in different folders that wilh a different name I ...

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I have a lot of different hobby, and my favorite one is listening to music. There are plenty of music files in my computer folders. I will store them in different folders that wilh a different name I have personalised. For example, there are "Jazz", "LadyGAGA", "Symphony" etc.
Music plays a really important and positive role in my daily life. When I feel despond, I can choose to chat with my friends or can hanging out. However, the most perfect way for me is to turning on the Mp3! Music can cheer me up again and bring me happiness! All in all, I really love music, so I can't live without it!
这样可不可以？
因为你是在叙述你喜欢音乐的事实，所以并不用特别使用过去式。

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