我写了一篇英语作文,麻烦你们帮我看看有什么错误,这是初中的,看看可以打几分,Should teenagers go out with their friends on weekendsRecently ,I’ve had a discussion with myparents about whether teenagers should go out wit

我写了一篇英语作文,麻烦你们帮我看看有什么错误,这是初中的,看看可以打几分,Should teenagers go out with their friends on weekendsRecently ,I’ve had a discussion with myparents about whether teenagers should go out wit
我写了一篇英语作文,麻烦你们帮我看看有什么错误,这是初中的,看看可以打几分,
Should teenagers go out with their friends on weekends
Recently ,I’ve had a discussion with myparents about whether teenagers should go out with their friends on weekends.
My parents think it not good for us go out
with friends on weekends,they think it’s waste time on weekends,we’d better
go over lessons or have a good sleep instead.And if we can help parents do
some housework,they will be more happier.
But I don’t agree,I think take part in
activities is a very important part of our life,after five busy and tired
weekends,we should relaxed ourseves.
Sowe ‘d better go out with our friends on weekends.

我写了一篇英语作文,麻烦你们帮我看看有什么错误,这是初中的,看看可以打几分,Should teenagers go out with their friends on weekendsRecently ,I’ve had a discussion with myparents about whether teenagers should go out wit
Recently ,I’ve had a discussion with myparents ---------这句有Recently,也就是说最近,过去时就行了,'ve去掉.
My parents think( it) not good for us go out---------it's
they will be (more happier)-------------------more删除
after five busy and tired weekends--------------我就不改了,你自己看看吧^_^
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My parents thought it not good for us to go out
2.
it’s a waste of time on weekends
3.
they will be happier 去掉 more
4.
taking part in activities is a very important part of our life,
5.
after five busy and tired weekdays, we should relax ourselves
估计9分吧

I've had 改I had
it’s waste time 改wasting
have a good sleep instead改to instead it.
help parents do some housework改 help sb to do sth
more happier去more 或改为 much happy
I don’t agree改I...

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I've had 改I had
it’s waste time 改wasting
have a good sleep instead改to instead it.
help parents do some housework改 help sb to do sth
more happier去more 或改为 much happy
I don’t agree改I disagree
after five busy and tired weekends 不能理解，自己看着办吧
we should relaxed ourseves.改relax
PS：写作文最好不要用缩写 eg. it's=it is
大概就是这样了，多少分就不知到了，不过应该能拿10分以上吧。

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May teenagers go out with their friends on weekends？
Recently ,I’ve had a discussion with my parents about whether teenagers may go out with their friends on weekends.
My parents think it's ...

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May teenagers go out with their friends on weekends？
Recently ,I’ve had a discussion with my parents about whether teenagers may go out with their friends on weekends.
My parents think it's not good for us to go out
with friends on weekends, they think it’s a waste of time and it's not safe , we’d better
go over lessons or have a good sleep at home instead. And if we can help parents do
some housework, they will be happier.
But I don’t agree with them. I think taking part in some
activities is a very important part of our life, After five busy and tiring
weekdays, we should relax ourseves.And we will look after ourselves.
So I think we can go out with our friends on weekends.
这篇作文基本说出了自己的想法，有一些语病，我已经帮你改过来了。情态动词应该用may意思是可以做某事吗。
现在应该给个满分了吧，哈

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