求英语大神改语法错误!英语大神快现身!1The title named ‘xxx’ has a tone of sarcastic and I’m crazy about it.（总感觉不是很连贯,怎么改更好捏）2The protagonist,Sam’s parents died when he was a baby and he led a fr

求英语大神改语法错误!英语大神快现身!1The title named ‘xxx’ has a tone of sarcastic and I’m crazy about it.（总感觉不是很连贯,怎么改更好捏）2The protagonist,Sam’s parents died when he was a baby and he led a fr
求英语大神改语法错误!英语大神快现身!
1The title named ‘xxx’ has a tone of sarcastic and I’m crazy about it.（总感觉不是很连贯,怎么改更好捏）
2The protagonist,Sam’s parents died when he was a baby and he led a free life with his sister and her husband David,a blacksmith who takesPip on as an apprentice and taught him his trade.（这句语法绝对有问题的.大神可不可以顺带下那种逗号逗号好多逗号的句子怎么用捏）
3The soft things had came back to his heart already and he became an average person again.（总想用逗号逗号的句子可是不知道怎么用）
4 Compared with those heroes’,Sam’s biography is more close to life.(with those heroes’这里感觉有问题.)
大神可不可以顺带下那种逗号逗号好多逗号的句子怎么用捏,比如说（.where Jossi,Sam's young lady,and her old father,lived.还有比如Whenever it will be safe to get him on board a foreign ship,there he would be,all ready ,down by the river.）这两句都用了好多逗号,平时该怎么用捏
重点是怎么用哈~
重点是怎么用哈~那种很多逗号的说

求英语大神改语法错误!英语大神快现身!1The title named ‘xxx’ has a tone of sarcastic and I’m crazy about it.（总感觉不是很连贯,怎么改更好捏）2The protagonist,Sam’s parents died when he was a baby and he led a fr
What makes me crazy  is that the title 'XXX' features a sense of irony.
绝对没有问题
He,whose heart the soft things had already came back to,became an average person again.
没有问题
关于好多逗号的句子,就是写的时候要把某个的属性以及行为分清主次,把主当成朱据部分,次要的都变成逗号和从句.很随意的.

1The title named ‘xxx’ has a tone of sarcastic and I’m crazy about it.（总感觉不是很连贯，怎么改更好捏）

* I am crazy about the pronunce of a tone of sarcastic of the title named "XXX". (改了，你看看吧)
2The pr...

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1The title named ‘xxx’ has a tone of sarcastic and I’m crazy about it.（总感觉不是很连贯，怎么改更好捏）

* I am crazy about the pronunce of a tone of sarcastic of the title named "XXX". (改了，你看看吧)
2The protagonist,Sam’s parents died when he was a baby and he led a free life with his sister and her husband David, a blacksmith who takesPip on as an apprentice and taught him his trade.（这句语法绝对有问题的。。。大神可不可以顺带下那种逗号逗号好多逗号的句子怎么用捏）
* 逻辑上好混乱，前面那个主角很别扭，呵呵，分两句说可能更清晰一些
The protagonist Sam, his parents died when he was a baby, led a free life with his sister and her husband David. David is a blacksmith who takesPip on as an apprentice and taught him his trade.

3The soft things had came back to his heart already and he became an average person again.（总想用逗号逗号的句子可是不知道怎么用）

* After the soft things came back to his heart, he became an average person again. (这样用逗号就自然一些了)
4 Compared with those heroes’, Sam’s biography is more close to life。(with those heroes’这里感觉有问题。。。)
大神可不可以顺带下那种逗号逗号好多逗号的句子怎么用捏，比如说（......where Jossi,Sam's young lady,and her old father, lived.还有比如Whenever it will be safe to get him on board a foreign ship, there he would be, all ready ,down by the river.）

* In comparison with those Heros‘, Sam’s biography is more close to life.

5 这两句都用了好多逗号，平时该怎么用捏
重点是怎么用哈~重点是怎么用哈~那种很多逗号的说
* 个人觉得，不要讲那么长的句子，会把说的人累死，把听的人也给累死了。我不是大神，我英语很烂，但好歹也在国外混过5年，我觉得简单就是华丽，简约就是魅力。欢迎交流

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1. I‘m crazy about the title named"XXX" which has a tone of sarcastic.

2. The protagonist,Sam,whose parents died when he was a baby,led a free life with his sister and he...

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   1. I‘m crazy about the title named"XXX" which has a tone of sarcastic.

   2. The protagonist,Sam,whose parents died when he was a baby,led a free life with his sister and her husband David, a blacksmith who took him as an apprentice and taught him his trade.

   3. The soft things had came back to his heart already and made him be an average person again.
      

   4. Compared with the biographies of those heroes , Sam’s  is more close to life
      
      

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