请检查并修改我的一篇英文日记,9th,October.foggyThere is a special feeling and misty surroundings in the foggy school.As I go,I think of you.If you are here,I will notice nothing ,even the haze over the river,the dew drop on the leaves.I

请检查并修改我的一篇英文日记,9th,October.foggyThere is a special feeling and misty surroundings in the foggy school.As I go,I think of you.If you are here,I will notice nothing ,even the haze over the river,the dew drop on the leaves.I
请检查并修改我的一篇英文日记,
9th,October.foggy
There is a special feeling and misty surroundings in the foggy school.As I go,I think of you.If you are here,I will notice nothing ,even the haze over the river,the dew drop on the leaves.I will see nothing but you.I remember meeting you yesterday,which was really quiet,but today I don't find you.Are you hidding in the fog?This days I am in a monthly exam.because our exam room is next to the room which I don't want to see,I was not a bit happy.when I think you are stay in the room downstairs,I was a little consoled.Okay,that's all.I will study then.

请检查并修改我的一篇英文日记,9th,October.foggyThere is a special feeling and misty surroundings in the foggy school.As I go,I think of you.If you are here,I will notice nothing ,even the haze over the river,the dew drop on the leaves.I
special and misty feeling...misty是形容词.
in the fogging school.似乎用in such a foggy day 更符合表达方式
As i go,i think of you.直接就用：i was thinking about you.即可
the haze over the river...haze above the river
I will see nothing but you...把 will拿掉比较好.
I remember meeting you yesterday.I remember yesterday when i met you
today i dont find you ...today i cannot find you
this days...these days
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because our exam room is next to the room which I don't want to see,I was not a bit happy
I was a bit upset,because our exam room is next to the room which I don't want to see
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when I think you are stay in the room downstairs,I was a little consoled
When i image that you were standing in that room downstairs,that is a great consolation to me.
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9 October.foggy,
有一种特殊的情感和模糊环境在雾蒙蒙的学校当我去,我就会想起你. 如果你在这里,我一定会注意到,即使在河里,烟雾晨露叶上我要看什么,但是你. 我记得见过你,昨天是非常安静,但是今天我不找你. 你是在雾中歪曲吗这几天我在一个月exam.because检查室是我们隔壁的房间里,我不想看到,我一点也不happy.when我想你留在房间里
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9 October.foggy,
有一种特殊的情感和模糊环境在雾蒙蒙的学校当我去,我就会想起你. 如果你在这里,我一定会注意到,即使在河里,烟雾晨露叶上我要看什么,但是你. 我记得见过你,昨天是非常安静,但是今天我不找你. 你是在雾中歪曲吗这几天我在一个月exam.because检查室是我们隔壁的房间里,我不想看到,我一点也不happy.when我想你留在房间里
我只能帮你翻译部好意思。不过我有点看不懂你写的是什么？

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