帮我检查一下我的英语作文有没有错.My dreamIn five years ,I want to be a policeman.Because I think policemen are very mighty and handsome ,so I want to be a policeman in my future.When I was a ten-year-old child,I wanted to be a doctor.

帮我检查一下我的英语作文有没有错.My dreamIn five years ,I want to be a policeman.Because I think policemen are very mighty and handsome ,so I want to be a policeman in my future.When I was a ten-year-old child,I wanted to be a doctor.
帮我检查一下我的英语作文有没有错.
My dream
In five years ,I want to be a policeman.Because I think policemen are very mighty and handsome ,so I want to be a policeman in my future.When I was a ten-year-old child,I wanted to be a doctor.Because they can help cure patients,and they work in the hispital.So I had a lot of dream.But now I want to be a vet,because I love animals .I often play with animals.Vets can look after animals and they can work with animals every day.I believe I can be a vet in my future because it is my dream.

帮我检查一下我的英语作文有没有错.My dreamIn five years ,I want to be a policeman.Because I think policemen are very mighty and handsome ,so I want to be a policeman in my future.When I was a ten-year-old child,I wanted to be a doctor.
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My dream
In five years ,I want to be a policeman.Because I think policemen are very mighty and handsome ,so I want to be a policeman in my future.When I was a ten-year-old child,I wanted to be a doctor.Because they can help cure patients,and they work in hispitals.So I had a lot of dreams.But now I want to be a vet,because I love animals .I often play with animals.Vets can look after animals and they can work with animals every day.I believe I can be a vet in my future because it is my dream.
Wish your dream would come true!祝你梦想成真!

I had a lot of dreams. 应为复数dreams.

In five years ,I want to be a policeman.Because I think policemen are very mighty and handsome , I want to be a policeman in my future.When I was a ten-year-old child,I wanted to be a doctor. Because ...

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In five years ,I want to be a policeman.Because I think policemen are very mighty and handsome , I want to be a policeman in my future.When I was a ten-year-old child,I wanted to be a doctor. Because the doctors can cure patients,and they work in the hispital. So I had a lot of dreams. But now I want to be a vet, because I love animals . I often play with animals.Vets can look after and work with animals every day. I believe I can be a vet in my future because it is my dream.
改了一部分，但是你究竟相当警察还是兽医啊？开头第一句明明写的是5年后要当警察啊。
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Because they can help cure(ing) patients.
help doing ~

dream是可数名词所以是so I had a lot of dreams其他的问题我是没有找出来

My dream
In five years' time, I hope I can be a policeman. I think highly of policemen because they are courageous and xxx. When I was ten years old, I wanted to be a doctor. Being a doctor is nob...

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My dream
In five years' time, I hope I can be a policeman. I think highly of policemen because they are courageous and xxx. When I was ten years old, I wanted to be a doctor. Being a doctor is noble, they can cure patients. Later on, I wanted to be a veterinarian because I loved animals. If I can be any one of those mentioned above in the future means my dream has come true.

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