求改错last winter vacation,some of my classmates decide to travel with their friends ,while I chose to take pate-time job to gain experience and earn some money.I learned from my teacher that a nearby company was looking after students with good h

求改错last winter vacation,some of my classmates decide to travel with their friends ,while I chose to take pate-time job to gain experience and earn some money.I learned from my teacher that a nearby company was looking after students with good h
求改错last winter vacation,some of my classmates decide to travel with their friends ,
while I chose to take pate-time job to gain experience and earn some money.I learned from my teacher that a nearby company was looking after students with good handwriting to write addresses on envelope.the pay were 10cents per envelope.I headed for the company,feeling sure I would easy finish 300 envelopes in five hours and to earn the money.actual,I only finished 200.now,I fully understand how hard is to earn money.getting out of the classroom is indeed necessary for we all.

求改错last winter vacation,some of my classmates decide to travel with their friends ,while I chose to take pate-time job to gain experience and earn some money.I learned from my teacher that a nearby company was looking after students with good h
while I chose to take pate-time job to gain experience and earn some money.I learned from my teacher that a nearby company was looking FOR students with good handwriting to write addresses on envelope.the pay WAS 10cents per envelope.I headed for the company,feeling sure I would easILY finish 300 envelopes in five hours and (to去掉) earn the money.actualLY ,I only finished 200.now,I fully understand how hard IT is to earn money.getting out of the classroom is indeed necessary for we all.

数字为行号：
（标题里）：decide -> decided； their 可以省略。
1：while -> but / however 这里不是同步而是转折。take -> take up。pate-time job-> a part-time job。gain experience -> gain working experiences。earn some money -> e...

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数字为行号：
（标题里）：decide -> decided； their 可以省略。
1：while -> but / however 这里不是同步而是转折。take -> take up。pate-time job-> a part-time job。gain experience -> gain working experiences。earn some money -> earn pocket money。下一句改成teacher主语的说法，避免每句都是I 做主语。
2：a nearby company -> a local company。looking after -> seeking after或looking for。write -> print。
3：envelope -> envelopes。the -> The。were -> was。10 -> ten。sure -> confident that。
4：easy -> easily。300 -> as many as three hundred。and to earn the money ->删掉。actual, I only finished 200 -> However I tried, I finished only with two hundred in the end. fully ->删掉。
5：-> understand how hard it is to earn just a bit of pocket money in the real world. Getting out of the classroom to have hands-on experiences is indeed necessary for us all.

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My winter vacation
During the winter vacation，nothing is different of my life. I wake up 11 o'clock Am everyday，after a washing，I have a good lunch with my parents. Next ,I play computer game...

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My winter vacation
During the winter vacation，nothing is different of my life. I wake up 11 o'clock Am everyday，after a washing，I have a good lunch with my parents. Next ,I play computer games till the time to have supper. After have dinner, I go on playing till 2 o'clock Am， and then go to sleep with tired. This is one dull day of my winter vacation.
But I haven't bored all the time. Sometimes I read the books， sometime I listen to the music or the radio in the bed， because it was very cold outside and snowy all the day. And I also meet some of my good friends during the vacation， we have a very long talk about the life of each other in the past year and play table tennis together. And I watched the spring festival party of the CCTV ！I think this is the thing most people of China doing at that time.
That's all， all my dull，coldly and snowy winter vacation

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