寻高手、求一篇英语作文.Advanced cell phone.词数在200个左右哈.

寻高手、求一篇英语作文.Advanced cell phone.词数在200个左右哈.
寻高手、求一篇英语作文.
Advanced cell phone.词数在200个左右哈.

寻高手、求一篇英语作文.Advanced cell phone.词数在200个左右哈.
The past twenty years has witnessed the fast development of the cell phone along with science and technology, which makes it have a variety of functions. Not only can it be used to make phone calls, but it can also do many other things, such as taking photos, sending messages and so on.
解释：
1. 第一句用现在完成时更好,the past twenty years视为一个整体,动词用单数形式；
2. 在technology和which之间用逗号隔开,这句话太长了,不利于读者的阅读和理解；
3. 文章用了太多次的the cell phone,应避免重复使用,可用it代替；
4. make后面的宾补动词用原形have,不能用三单形式has；
5. not only...but also...句型并列两个句子时,前面用部分倒装；而且后面的but also最好拆开使用.
6. the cell phone can make calls不妥,应该是the cell phone can be used to make calls；
7. such as视为介词,后面加并列的动名词短语.

词数太多了，但是我可以给你一下建议，两百字，一共写20句就可以了。分三段，第一段6句，最后一段6句。开头申明观点，结尾重申。比较简单。而关键就是中间的8句,以这样：advantage,disadvantage各写两点，并且附加上论据。

SNOW
At dusk，the weather became colder while the sky was gray，and the cold wind was blowing strongly.It seemed that it was going to snow soon. A moment later，the snowflakes began to fall quietly.S...

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SNOW
At dusk，the weather became colder while the sky was gray，and the cold wind was blowing strongly.It seemed that it was going to snow soon. A moment later，the snowflakes began to fall quietly.Soon the land before my eyes was all white，like a beautiful blanket.Then it snowed more and more heavily.The trees were all covered with white quilts.The whole city became a silver world. The next morning，it stopped snowing and cleared up.I went into the yard.Looking far away，I saw a beautiful silver white world.A group of children were playing happily.Some were throwing snowballs to each other，others were making a snowman.Snow seemed to bring us warm and wishes.Cold as it was，nobaby felt cold in the white world. I love snow，because it is pure white.It brings us hope and vigour.
（中文）
雪黄昏，天气变冷，天空变成灰色，冷风强劲地吹着。似乎很快就要下雪了。
一会儿，雪花儿静静地飘落下来。很快眼前的大地变白了，像个美丽的毯子。然后，雪越下越大。树儿披上了厚厚的棉被。整个城市变成了银色的世界。
第二天早晨，雪停了，天气晴朗了。我走进院子里，远远望去，我看见了一个美丽的银白色的世界，一群孩子正在快活地做游戏。一些在互相掷雪球，其他的在堆雪人。雪似乎给我们带来了温暖和祝福。尽管天气很冷，但是没有人在这白色的世界中感觉到寒冷。
我喜爱雪，因为它的纯净。它带给我们希望和活力。

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