帮忙修改个英文作文Dear jimmyWe feel so terrible when we heard you were sick. Your energy, power, broad-minded are keep rising before my eyes, I cannot believe this has happened just after 5 months I saw you. I lost my mind as if I am dreamin

帮忙修改个英文作文Dear jimmyWe feel so terrible when we heard you were sick. Your energy, power, broad-minded are keep rising before my eyes, I cannot believe this has happened just after 5 months I saw you. I lost my mind as if I am dreamin
帮忙修改个英文作文
Dear jimmy
We feel so terrible when we heard you were sick. Your energy, power, broad-minded are keep rising before my eyes, I cannot believe this has happened just after 5 months I saw you. I lost my mind as if I am dreaming.
There is no need to say you are a great teacher, you taught us to do things in a proper way and boost our confidences. You guide us forward when we lost our direction. We are pride to be a member of the team.We will keep going on to spreading your value, your mind, and always be loyal to you.
We will bless you; hope the god will help you. We are looking forward to your healing, eager to listen to your voice again.
主要看看有没有语法错误，还有个问题是我觉得单句太多了，比如第二段，但是我又不知道怎么把它们连起来，我想表达个愿上帝在你身上彰显神迹的意思，不知掉怎么说，希望大家帮帮我，回答好的我会追加双倍分，谢谢

帮忙修改个英文作文Dear jimmyWe feel so terrible when we heard you were sick. Your energy, power, broad-minded are keep rising before my eyes, I cannot believe this has happened just after 5 months I saw you. I lost my mind as if I am dreamin
Dear Jimmy,
We feel so terrible when we heard you were sick. Your energy, power, broad-minded qualities are keep rising before my eyes, and I cannot believe this has happened just after 5 months I have seen you. I lose my mind as if I am dreaming.
There is no need to say you are a great teacher. You taught us to do things in a proper way and boost our confidence. You guided us forward when we lost our directions. We are pride to be a member of the team.We will keep going to spread your value, your mind, and we will always be loyal to you.
We will bless you; hope the god will help you. We are looking forward to your healing and hearing to your voice again.

这么简单 查字典都能翻译出来

1、feel改为felt
2、keep rising 不好，改为keep emerging，broad-minded删掉
3、has happened不对，happened即可
4、I am dreaming 改为 I was dreaming
5、You guide 改为Your guide
6、forward 改为 to move on
7、are pride to be 改为are proud of being
请采纳，谢谢。