帮忙修改一篇七十字的作文,急,有错的帮我找出来一下,最好把朴素的句子修改下,改成比较漂亮的句子,越漂亮越好,最好把两句话能用从句的就用起来.我明天要展示给全班看的,摆脱,哥哥姐姐

帮忙修改一篇七十字的作文,急,有错的帮我找出来一下,最好把朴素的句子修改下,改成比较漂亮的句子,越漂亮越好,最好把两句话能用从句的就用起来.我明天要展示给全班看的,摆脱,哥哥姐姐
帮忙修改一篇七十字的作文,急,
有错的帮我找出来一下,最好把朴素的句子修改下,改成比较漂亮的句子,越漂亮越好,最好把两句话能用从句的就用起来.我明天要展示给全班看的,摆脱,哥哥姐姐帮个忙,谢拉~
As we all know,life is very important.As a result,we should keep our body well.Here are some things you can do to keep yourself healthy.Having a good diet is very important.Doing exercise is another good way of keeping yourself healthy.Exercise makes you fitter and helps you relax.And psychological health is important as well.This is my way of keeping healthy.
题目就是MY WAY OF KEEPING HEALTHY 所以最后要点题的

帮忙修改一篇七十字的作文,急,有错的帮我找出来一下,最好把朴素的句子修改下,改成比较漂亮的句子,越漂亮越好,最好把两句话能用从句的就用起来.我明天要展示给全班看的,摆脱,哥哥姐姐
As a result 改为 Consequently,避免前两句都出现As.
保持身体健康,keep our body fit.
好的饮食是重要的,不要加having.A good habit of diet is very important 可改为好的饮食习惯是重要的.
做体育锻炼,一般分两种,workout（有氧运动）和Sport(体育运动）,很少说exercise.
Exercise makes you fitter and helps you relax.fitter可以改为healthier 因为你前面一直在说healthy.relax后面可以加上,after hard study 在紧张的学习之后.
结尾可以说Above is my tips of keeping healthy.以上是我保持健康的小窍门.因为你没有说得很具体,说方法有点大了.

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As we all know, life is important to humanbeings. As a result, we should keep fit. First of all, having a good diet is essential. Doing exercise is also a good way of keeping healthy. Exercise helps y...

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As we all know, life is important to humanbeings. As a result, we should keep fit. First of all, having a good diet is essential. Doing exercise is also a good way of keeping healthy. Exercise helps you relax and make you slim. On the other hand, psychological health is important as well. Follow these advice and you will be healthy and happy.

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It is no doubt that life is very important for everyone. We should keep healthy so that we can have energy to do what we want to do. To began with, I cling to that a good habit ...

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It is no doubt that life is very important for everyone. We should keep healthy so that we can have energy to do what we want to do. To began with, I cling to that a good habit of diet is very important. Besides, doing exercise is a necessary way of keeping healthy. Last but not the least, psychological health is also very beneficial for us. Hope what I suggest can help you. Thank you!

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It’s no doubt that life is important.So we should keep our body fit. Here are some things you can do to keep yourself healthy.A good habit of diet is essential. Besides, doing exercise is another good...

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It’s no doubt that life is important.So we should keep our body fit. Here are some things you can do to keep yourself healthy.A good habit of diet is essential. Besides, doing exercise is another good way of keeping yourself healthy. Exercise makes you healthier and helps you relax. Last but not the least ,psychological [saikə'lɔdʒikl] 心理的health is important as well so that we should keep ourselves happy everyday.This is my way of keeping healthy.

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