或者可以在里面加点精彩的句子,Ladies and Gentlemen:Good morning!I’m very glad to be here.Today,the topic of my speech is my life,and the title is “Composes the music movement of youth hood with contribution”After graduated from uni

或者可以在里面加点精彩的句子,Ladies and Gentlemen:Good morning!I’m very glad to be here.Today,the topic of my speech is my life,and the title is “Composes the music movement of youth hood with contribution”After graduated from uni
或者可以在里面加点精彩的句子,
Ladies and Gentlemen:
Good morning!I’m very glad to be here.Today,the topic of my speech is my life,and the title is “Composes the music movement of youth hood with contribution”
After graduated from university,I gave up superiority easily and comfortably life,and to participated in a plan of our country which is Supporting New rural reconstruction,supporting education,supporting medical science and helping the poor.Many of my teacher and classmates can’t understood me extremely and ask why did you chosen like this?
I don’t want to brag about how great I was,I just want to say:if you want to be a youth aspirant,you have no choice but go to the basic level place and where your motherland and the people most need help.
Arrived at basic unit,I’m not only exercising my knowledge to works,but also learning more from cadre at the basic level and villages who are experienced.I’ll improve my comprehensive ability during living in basic,and then I can develop my ability and value in best.
And now,I’m here about one year .I can actually get touch with my improves,beside it I have seeing a beautiful scenes about New rural reconstruction .and all of this are what I can’t learn from textbooks and campus.
So,it’s my life,although sometimes I feel hardly and difficultly,I’m firmly believe a youth if he or she want to be aspirant,he (or she) have no choice,but get closely with people.
Dear friends,go to the basic level place and where your motherland and the people most need help.And Composes the music movement of youth hood with contribution.
Thanks!
有什么谚语适合我这个主题的啊？

或者可以在里面加点精彩的句子,Ladies and Gentlemen:Good morning!I’m very glad to be here.Today,the topic of my speech is my life,and the title is “Composes the music movement of youth hood with contribution”After graduated from uni
1.建议先说问候good morning,再说L & G.
2.第1段改成：It's my honor to stand here delivering(/to deliver) this speech,and my topic is:……（一般不用title的,还有我觉得题目要用composing of……比较好）
3.第2段（修改处加括号,——即替换为）：
After graduated from university,I gave up （删去superiority） （easily——easy) and (comfortably——comfortable) life,and (to——then) participated in a plan of our country which is Supporting New rural reconstruction,supporting education,supporting medical science and helping the poor.
Many of my teacher(s) and classmates (can’t understood——couldn't understand) me (extremely——at all)
and (ask改为 wondered that) why (did you chosen like this改成 would I make this decision)?
4.第3段
don’t want to brag about how great I （was——am),I just want to say:if you want to be a youth aspirant,you (have no choice but说得太绝对,改成had better) go to the basic level place (去掉and） where （your motherland and the people直接改成our country,因为这句话完全用中文翻译过去反而奇怪!）most need （去掉help）.
5.第4段
（Arrived——staying) at 加上the basic unit,I（’m——'ve） not only （exercising——put) my knowledge to (works改为good use of the work),but also （learning——learnt）加something more from 加the cadre (去掉at the basic level and villages） who are experienced.I（’ll improve——'ve improved) my (comprehensive ability——comprehension） during living in basic,(and then I can develop my ability and value in best这一整句,不明白你要表达什么耶~）.
6.第5段
And now,I（’m——have been) here 加上for about one year .I can actually get touch with my (improves——improvement),(beside加s,然后去掉it） I have （seeing——seen） a beautiful scene去掉s about New rural reconstruction .and all of （this——these) are what I can’t learn from textbooks and campus.
7.第6段
So,it’s my life,although sometimes I feel （hardly改成hard或tough,去掉and difficultly,） I’m firmly believe 加上that a youth if he or she want to be aspirant,he (or she) have改成has no choice,but gets close（去掉ly） with people.
Dear friends,go to the basic level place （and where your motherland and the people most need help同上）.And Composes the music movement of youth hood with contribution.
写在最后面：我说楼主啊,你的题目问题真的要修改,这样直接从中文翻过去,真的很怪（没有这种说法的啊!）

第一行my life左右加引号。
youth 和 hood 中间不要间隔，这是一个词。
第三行after 后面把graduated 改为graduation，后面把participated的d去
掉。
第五行的teacher加s 。后面的understood 改为understand。
第六行的most后加ly。
第十一行的beside后加s。后面的...

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第一行my life左右加引号。
youth 和 hood 中间不要间隔，这是一个词。
第三行after 后面把graduated 改为graduation，后面把participated的d去
掉。
第五行的teacher加s 。后面的understood 改为understand。
第六行的most后加ly。
第十一行的beside后加s。后面的seeing改为seen。
第十四行的hardly和difficultly的ly都去掉。后面的I’m改为I。
第十五行的closely的ly去掉。

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