英语书信 写作 求大神看看有没有问题Hi ! Mr. Charles: I am a student from China. I hope that my email don't interrupt you with your work. When I saw the detailed imformation about Oberlin College, I was impressed by two things

英语书信 写作 求大神看看有没有问题Hi ! Mr. Charles: I am a student from China. I hope that my email don't interrupt you with your work. When I saw the detailed imformation about Oberlin College, I was impressed by two things
英语书信 写作 求大神看看有没有问题
Hi ! Mr. Charles:
I am a student from China. I hope that my email don't interrupt you with your work.
When I saw the detailed imformation about Oberlin College, I was impressed by two things, one is your teaching method "Learning and Labor". Because I think the best teaching is to help students relate the knowledge the have learned with the reality and that what I need. The other is your conservatory of music", because I have played SAXOPHONE for 6 years and I love the classic music.

Now I think it is time to ask you few questions (hope my words are not annoying):
1. Do Oberlin has the special training program for the amateur intrument player like me?
2. If I go to your college, can I get a job or something to make money and collect experience?
3. The last one, I really want your personal opinion please. Now I get strong interest in programing, so do you think I should major in Computer Science or not? My parents don't want me to do this because they think computer science don't have a bright future.
Thanks a lot! You are hearing from a student oversea, far from China. And a student who want to hear back from you, and learn something from you. Thanks again!

英语书信 写作 求大神看看有没有问题Hi ! Mr. Charles: I am a student from China. I hope that my email don't interrupt you with your work. When I saw the detailed imformation about Oberlin College, I was impressed by two things
这是我大概看了一下改过的,改过的我用大写提醒,你写作有一个特点就是很喜欢用The,有些不必要的我就直接删了,希望你认真去学一下the的用法哦,呵呵,希望能帮到你!
Mr. Charles:
Hi !
I am a student from China. I hope that my email don't interrupt you with your work.
When I saw the detailed imformation about Oberlin College, I was impressed by two things, one is your teaching method "Learning and Labor". Because I think the best teaching MEATHOD is to help students ATTACH the knowledge THEY have learned TO reality . The other is your conservatory of music", because I have played SAXOPHONE for 6 years and I love classic music.

Now I think I'D LIKE to ask you few questions (hope my words are not annoying):
1. Do Oberlin HAVE special training programS for amateur intrument playerS like me?
2. If I go to your college, can I get a job or something to make money and collect experience?
3. The last one, I really NEED your personal opinion please. Now I get strong interest in programing, so do you think I should major in Computer Science or not? My parents don't want me to do this because they think computer science doESn't have a bright future.
Thanks a lot! You are hearing from a student FROM CHINA, . And I'M SINCERELY LOOKING FORWARD FOR YOUR REPLY. Thanks again!