看看我写的演讲稿有没有语法错误之类的Today was my turn to speech ,I'm a little nervous.I prepared for a long time but didn't even know this talk about what.But the game is most people's favorite subject of,especially the boys.well,wh

看看我写的演讲稿有没有语法错误之类的Today was my turn to speech ,I'm a little nervous.I prepared for a long time but didn't even know this talk about what.But the game is most people's favorite subject of,especially the boys.well,wh
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Today was my turn to speech ,I'm a little nervous.
I prepared for a long time but didn't even know this talk about what.
But the game is most people's favorite subject of,especially the boys.
well,what's Your favorite game Maybe someone will say DNF or CF
They are online games ,and many students love to play them very much.
and It will spend too much money and time.Even some students spend the whole weekend time to play .Games Led to their homework doesn't have time to do,So they go to school to copy other classmates homework
Then their grades will declines.
So I want to tell everybody:It is benefitful to your mind to play game to a certain extent,but bad to you if you get addicted to it.
thank you

看看我写的演讲稿有没有语法错误之类的Today was my turn to speech ,I'm a little nervous.I prepared for a long time but didn't even know this talk about what.But the game is most people's favorite subject of,especially the boys.well,wh
It's my turn to have a speech today,I'm a little nervous.
I have prepared for a long time but I really don't kown.what to talk about.
But the game is most people's favorite subject of,especially the boys.
well,what's Your favorite game Maybe someone may say DNF or CF
They are online games ,and many students love to play them very much.
and I will spend too much money and time on them.some students spend the whole weekend to play games and they don't have much time to do their homework,so they copy other classmates‘ homework.
So I want to tell you that It is benefitful to your mind to play game to a certain extentbut bad to you if you get addicted to it.

Today is my trun to speech
I have prepare it for a long time but I didn't even know what it is about
But the game I am going to talk about is certainly many people's favourite ,especially...

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Today is my trun to speech
I have prepare it for a long time but I didn't even know what it is about
But the game I am going to talk about is certainly many people's favourite ,especially the boys.
Well ,what is your favourite game? Maybe someone will say DNF or CF
Both of them are online games.Many students love playing them very much.And it will make many students spend a lot of time and money.Even some students spend the whole weekend in playing them.Games make them doesn't have time to finish their homework,that is why they go to school to copy other classmates' homework.
Then their study will become poor.
So I want to tell everybody that it is beneficial for you to play game to a certain extent,but bad when you get addicted to it.

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It is my turn to give you a speech today.I am a little bit nervous.I prepared for a long time and what I am going to talk about is about computer games.Computer games are popular among people,especia...

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It is my turn to give you a speech today.I am a little bit nervous.I prepared for a long time and what I am going to talk about is about computer games.Computer games are popular among people,especially among the boys.Well,what's Your favorite game ? Maybe someone will say DNF or CF They are online games.And many students are addicted to playing them very much.Some students even spend the whole weekend on it.Therefore,they have no time for their homework,which leads to their copying other classmates' homework.Then the falling of their grades follows.What's worse, playing computer games costs much money.So I want to tell everybody:Don't overact.It will do good to your mind if you make your game time under control.ON the contrary,you will gain nothing but loss.
改死我了~~

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Today is my turn to give a speech , I'm a little nervous.
I have prepared for a long time but I even don't know what is this speech about.However,someone may be inerested in this topic,especially...

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Today is my turn to give a speech , I'm a little nervous.
I have prepared for a long time but I even don't know what is this speech about.However,someone may be inerested in this topic,especially the boys.
well,what's Your favorite game ? Maybe someone will say DNF or CF
which are online games ,and many students love to play them very much.But It will spend too much money and waste your time.I know some students even spend the whole weekend to play .Games Leave them no time to deal with their homework .So they copy other classmates' homework at school.
Then they will fail in their grades.
So I want to tell everybody:It is benefit to your mind to play game to a certain extent,but it will be bad to you if you get addicted to it.
thank you

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时态,is my turn.
第二句。应是i have prepard this for a long time but i even don't know what i am going to talk about.
第三句；but this is the people's favorite game,especially the boys like this very muc...

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时态,is my turn.
第二句。应是i have prepard this for a long time but i even don't know what i am going to talk about.
第三句；but this is the people's favorite game,especially the boys like this very much.
第六句的and改为but会更好
第七句；应是，as a result ,playing games makes them don't have enough time to finish their homework.so they go to school and copy others' work
第九句：will后用动词原形decline
第十句；beneficial
其余的还行

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Today it's my turn to give speech , I'm a bit nervous.
I have prepared this for a long time but didn't even know what this talk is about.
Game is most people's favorite subject, especially bo...

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Today it's my turn to give speech , I'm a bit nervous.
I have prepared this for a long time but didn't even know what this talk is about.
Game is most people's favorite subject, especially boys.
Well,what's Your favorite game? Maybe someone will say DNF or CF.
They are online games, many students love to play, and It cost too much money and time.
Some students spend the whole weekend to play.
Game makes them have no time to do homework, so they copy from other classmates,their grade drops.
What I want to tell: it will give benefit to your mind to play game with certain extent, but it will hurt you if you get addicted to it.
Thank you
没法一个句子一个句子地改，只好根据意思整体改了。:-)

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第一行 是中式英语 而且时态不对 speech是名词 应该写成 Ii is my turn to make a speech today.
第二行是中式英语 应该为 I have prepared it for a long time but still don't know what this talk is about.
第三行 改为 But game, for most...

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第一行 是中式英语 而且时态不对 speech是名词 应该写成 Ii is my turn to make a speech today.
第二行是中式英语 应该为 I have prepared it for a long time but still don't know what this talk is about.
第三行 改为 But game, for most people,especially for boys, is their favorite subject.
第四行和第五行还好
第六行 and It will spend 此处的spend 要改成take或者cost
第七行 to play改成 playing 另外Games Led to their homework doesn't have time to do应改为 Games make them have no time to their homework.
第九行 declines去掉S
第十行 benefitful没有这单词 应该为beneficial for your mind .....but bad for
差不多多改出来了 希望演讲成功

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第一句It is my turn to give you a speech today.第二句，I have prepared for a long time,but I still don't know what this talk is about.第三句的of去掉.后面And it will take students too much money and time.Even some of...

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第一句It is my turn to give you a speech today.第二句，I have prepared for a long time,but I still don't know what this talk is about.第三句的of去掉.后面And it will take students too much money and time.Even some of them spend the whole day playing these games.Games cause the consequense that they have no time to finish their homework.后面那句要用classmates'…后面那句最好是Then they get poor grades in exams.最后几句：It is benifit for you to relax you mind by playing gamer when you are tired at school.后面可以用…最后一句可以添一句：That's all,thank you.

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It's my turn to give a speech in public today, i am so nervous to be honest.
I prepared this speech for a long time but still have no idea what could i talk about.
Maybe I can try starting fro...

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It's my turn to give a speech in public today, i am so nervous to be honest.
I prepared this speech for a long time but still have no idea what could i talk about.
Maybe I can try starting from Game, because Game is always the most popular topic, especially for boys.
Well, what's your favorite game? Maybe DNF or CF.
They are online games, and many students enoy them so much and spend too much money and time on them-sometimes the whole weekend.
Online Games took so much time which they should spent on homework, so they have no choice except coping others' homework.
The result of doing this is the poor score of exams.
What i want to say is, playing onine games can exercise your reaction ability, but do not get addict to it.
Thank you.
纯粹帮忙了。

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语法,表达等都有一定的问题.造成的原因-中式思维.
比如第一句,这样要好些: Today,It is my turn to....