帮忙英语作文改错,在线等,急!Good morning.I'm glad to be here to introduce myself.My name is Shang Yun,and I am a seventeen-year-olds girl.I come from China and I'm studying in Luqiao High School.I have some interests include swimming in su

帮忙英语作文改错,在线等,急!Good morning.I'm glad to be here to introduce myself.My name is Shang Yun,and I am a seventeen-year-olds girl.I come from China and I'm studying in Luqiao High School.I have some interests include swimming in su
帮忙英语作文改错,在线等,急!
Good morning.I'm glad to be here to introduce myself.My name is Shang Yun,and I am a seventeen-year-olds girl.I come from China and I'm studying in Luqiao High School.I have some interests include swimming in summer,playing the piano and reading novels.And I also like listening to music in my spare time.I'm a warm-harted girl who like making more friends.I'm fond of traveling and award of different customs.I have dreaming of traveling around the world since I'm a little girl.As a Chinese,I'm patriotic and really want to show the good qualities of our Nation to the world.So I am long to the chance to Germany.Please believe that I'm the right candidate and choose me!My introduction is over,thank you.
一楼说的几个我已经改了。我刚把写的看了一遍，发现又有一个。
fond of 后面那个award是要加ing的对吧？
（award of 到底是不是了解的意思？如果不是，那了解的英文应该为什么？）
还有the chance 后面是要改成to go to Germany事吧？
啊啊？大家在帮忙仔细看看。

帮忙英语作文改错,在线等,急!Good morning.I'm glad to be here to introduce myself.My name is Shang Yun,and I am a seventeen-year-olds girl.I come from China and I'm studying in Luqiao High School.I have some interests include swimming in su
Good morning.
I'm glad to be here to introduce myself. My name is Shang Yun, and I am a seventeen year's old girl. I'm from China and studying in Luqiao High School. My interests include swimming in summer, playing the piano and reading novels. And I also like listening to music in my spare time. I'm a warm-harted girl who likes helping people and making friends. I'm fond of traveling and attracted to different cultures. I've been hoping to travel around the world since I was a little girl. I feel lucky to be here and I really want to show the good qualities of our nation to the world. Please give me the opportunity to make my dream become true by allowing me to go to Germany. Please believe that I'm the most suitable candidate and choose me! That's all, thank you.
(You did a good job already. Hope you can get it. Good luck!)

a seventeen-year-olds girl old没有s
a warm-harted girl 应该是warm-hearted
I have dreaming of traveling 改为i have been dreaming of traveling
since I'm a little girl am 改was

seventeen-year-olds ————seventeen-year-old
warm-harted ————warm-hearted
who like——who likes
traveling——travel
award of 这个词用的不妥，是不是想表达喜欢不同的文化？用 interested in
就好。
since——but

seventeen-year-old girl.
I have some interests such as swimming in summer,playing the piano and reading novels.
I'm a warm-harted girl who like making friends.
aware of different customs....

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seventeen-year-old girl.
I have some interests such as swimming in summer,playing the piano and reading novels.
I'm a warm-harted girl who like making friends.
aware of different customs.
I have always been dreaming of traveling around the world since I was a little girl.
As a Chinese girl,I'm patriotic and really want to show the good qualities of our nation to the world.
I am longing for the chance to go to Germany.

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Good morning.I'm glad to be here to introduce myself.My name is Shang Yun. I am a seventeen-year-old girl.I come from China and I'm studying in Luqiao High School.I have many interests including swimm...

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Good morning.I'm glad to be here to introduce myself.My name is Shang Yun. I am a seventeen-year-old girl.I come from China and I'm studying in Luqiao High School.I have many interests including swimming ,playing the piano and reading. I also like listening to music at my spare time.I'm a warm-hearted girl who like making more friends.I'm fond of traveling and aware of different customs.I have been dreaming of traveling around the world since I was a little girl.As a Chinese,I'm patriotic and really want to show the good qualities of our Nation to the world.So I am long to the chance to Germany.I think I'm the right candidate and it^s right to give me the chance!My introduction is over,thank you.

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