请大家帮忙改一下这篇英语演讲稿(初中水平)My familyHello,everyone!I’m proud to make a speech here.I am fortunate to live in a very happy family.My mother and father are very caring of me.We have a lot of fun together.My father is a

请大家帮忙改一下这篇英语演讲稿(初中水平)My familyHello,everyone!I’m proud to make a speech here.I am fortunate to live in a very happy family.My mother and father are very caring of me.We have a lot of fun together.My father is a
请大家帮忙改一下这篇英语演讲稿(初中水平)
My family
Hello,everyone!I’m proud to make a speech here.
I am fortunate to live in a very happy family.My mother and father are very caring of me.We have a lot of fun together.My father is a teacher,he loves his job.My mother is a housewife,everyday she has a lot of housework to do.In winter,although the weather is cold,our house is always very warm.
At the weekends,my father like to read books and go fishing.He is good at going fishing.My mother likes to cook us interesting food for us.She was a good taste food for sweet tooth.We always have a very nice weekend together.
I look forward to having a lot of nice memories with my family.
I love each person in my family.I love my sweet warm home.
That’s all.Thank you!
She was a good taste food for sweet tooth.这个句子究竟有没有问题?
我感觉好像要把was改成has,
改好的可以通过站内信发给我或者直接发在这里：

请大家帮忙改一下这篇英语演讲稿(初中水平)My familyHello,everyone!I’m proud to make a speech here.I am fortunate to live in a very happy family.My mother and father are very caring of me.We have a lot of fun together.My father is a
My family
Hello,everyone!I’m honored(不是自豪,还是感到荣幸) to deliver（这是做演讲的短语,不用make） a speech here.
I am fortunate to live in a very happy family.My mother and father love me very much.We have a lot of fun together.My father is a teacher,he loves his job.My mother is a housewife,everyday she has a lot of housework to do.In winter,although the weather is cold,our house is always very warm.
At the weekends,my father likes reading books and going fishing.He is good at fishing.My mother likes cooking delicious food for us.She is really good at making dessert which to us sweet tooth is the most tasty food in the world.（她擅长制作甜品,对我们这些喜爱甜食的家伙来说可谓人间至味.） We always have a very nice weekend together.
I always cherish the nice memories of my family,moved by every moment.（我一直珍藏着我对这个家的美好回忆,为每个瞬间而感动）
I love everyone in my family.I love my sweet warm home.
That’s all.Thank you!
语法没有太大毛病,不过能说出sweet tooth真是厉害!不过用起来好像有点语句不通顺,给改了一下...没有改变总的文章,觉得这样说就可以了,平实的语言最能反映温馨了.

1.At the weekends, my father like to read books and go fishing
father是第三人称单数 要加s likes
2.My mother likes to cook us interesting food for us
这句话有点重复 要么去掉us要么去掉for us
3.嗯 要换成 has我个...

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1.At the weekends, my father like to read books and go fishing
father是第三人称单数 要加s likes
2.My mother likes to cook us interesting food for us
这句话有点重复 要么去掉us要么去掉for us
3.嗯 要换成 has我个人这么认为
4.I’m proud to make a speech here
改为I am proud of making a speech here.

是演讲比赛吧 我参加过 不要紧张 放松点 最主要的是要发音准确漂亮
加油！

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be proud of doing sth
care about me
my father like ---my father likes
cook us interesting 去掉us
She was a good taste food for sweet tooth.这句有问题，不知道你的中文意思想表达什么，所以没有给你改，如果需要改的话可以发站内信给我，写...

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be proud of doing sth
care about me
my father like ---my father likes
cook us interesting 去掉us
She was a good taste food for sweet tooth.这句有问题，不知道你的中文意思想表达什么，所以没有给你改，如果需要改的话可以发站内信给我，写上你的中文意思，可以帮你翻译。还有什么别的问题也可以提出来
其它的没什么问题了 可以尝试下稍微复杂的句式，而不只是简单句一句句的堆起来。 O(∩_∩)O~~

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My family
Hello, everyone! I’m proud to have this chance to make a speech here.
I am lucky to live in a very happy family. My mother and father love me deeply. We have a lot of fun together. ...

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My family
Hello, everyone! I’m proud to have this chance to make a speech here.
I am lucky to live in a very happy family. My mother and father love me deeply. We have a lot of fun together. My father is a teacher, he loves his job. My mother is a housewife, and everyday she does a lot of housework for us. In winter,although the weather is cold, our family always makes people feel warm.
On the weekends, my father likes reading books and going fishing. He is good at fishing. My mother likes to cook us interesting food. She is an expert of tasty food for sweet tooth. We always have a very nice weekend together.
I look forward to having a lot of nice memories with my family.
I love everyone in my family. I love my warm and sweet home.
That’s all.Thank you!

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有些表述、用词不大地道，但考虑到初中大家词汇量也不大，听的人也未必能懂，就不改了。
有些小的语法时态问题：
At the weekends,my father like to read books and go fishing.这里like应该用likes
My mother likes to cook us interesting food for us.这里前后有两个u...

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有些表述、用词不大地道，但考虑到初中大家词汇量也不大，听的人也未必能懂，就不改了。
有些小的语法时态问题：
At the weekends,my father like to read books and go fishing.这里like应该用likes
My mother likes to cook us interesting food for us.这里前后有两个us，重复了，要不删掉前面那个us，要不删掉后面那个for us.
She was a good taste food for sweet tooth.这句话完全不知道想说的是什么意思，能不能先解释一下你想说的中文是什么？was肯定时态是不对的，应该用一般现在时，正常一般用has a taste，但即使这样替换了，我还是看不懂这个句子的意思。
哦，还有一句刚才没看到，he is good at going fishing. going要去掉才对，fishing本身是钓鱼，go fishing是去钓鱼。

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我的家
嗨，各位！我很自豪能够在这里演讲。
我很幸运，生活在一个非常幸福的家庭之中。父母都很关心我。我们在一起很快乐。爸爸是一位教师，他热爱自己的工作。妈妈是一位家庭主妇，她每天都有很多家务活要干。冬天的时候天气很冷，但我们的房子里却总是充满温暖。
周末，爸爸喜欢读书、钓鱼。他擅长钓鱼。妈妈喜欢为我们烹饪美食。她爱好甜食。我们 总是在一起度过愉快的周末。
我希望与家...

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我的家
嗨，各位！我很自豪能够在这里演讲。
我很幸运，生活在一个非常幸福的家庭之中。父母都很关心我。我们在一起很快乐。爸爸是一位教师，他热爱自己的工作。妈妈是一位家庭主妇，她每天都有很多家务活要干。冬天的时候天气很冷，但我们的房子里却总是充满温暖。
周末，爸爸喜欢读书、钓鱼。他擅长钓鱼。妈妈喜欢为我们烹饪美食。她爱好甜食。我们 总是在一起度过愉快的周末。
我希望与家人一起留下很多美好的记忆。
我爱家里每一个人，我爱我那甜蜜温暖的家。
就这些，谢谢大家。
以上是翻译。
She was a good taste food for sweet tooth. 这个句子究竟这样说：She has a good taste for sweet tooth.

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Hello,everyone! It's my honor to make a speech here.
I am so lucky that I live in a very happy family. I am dearly loved by my parents,and we have a lot of fun together. My father who is a teacher...

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Hello,everyone! It's my honor to make a speech here.
I am so lucky that I live in a very happy family. I am dearly loved by my parents,and we have a lot of fun together. My father who is a teacher loves his job very much. My mother is a housewife,so she has a lot of housework to do every day. Although, in winter, it is cold outside,our house is always very warm because of love.
On the weekends, my father likes to read books and go fishing. He is good at going fishing. My mother likes to cook delicious food for us.We always have nice weekends together. I believe my memory with my family will be always happy. I love each member in my family, and I love my sweet home deeply.
That's all. Thank you!
She was a good taste food for sweet tooth. 是个病句，不知道小作者人表明什么意思。

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我的家人
大家好！我很高兴能够在这里发表演讲。
我很幸运能生活在一个非常幸福的家庭。我的母亲和父亲都非常照顾我。我们在一起有很多的乐趣。我父亲是一名教师，他热爱他的工作。我的母亲是一位家庭主妇，她每天有很多家务要做。在冬季，虽然天气寒冷，我们的房子总是非常温暖.
在周末，我的父亲喜欢看书和钓鱼。他擅长捕鱼。我母亲喜欢做我们喜欢吃的食物。她是一个很喜欢吃甜食的人。我们始终...

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我的家人
大家好！我很高兴能够在这里发表演讲。
我很幸运能生活在一个非常幸福的家庭。我的母亲和父亲都非常照顾我。我们在一起有很多的乐趣。我父亲是一名教师，他热爱他的工作。我的母亲是一位家庭主妇，她每天有很多家务要做。在冬季，虽然天气寒冷，我们的房子总是非常温暖.
在周末，我的父亲喜欢看书和钓鱼。他擅长捕鱼。我母亲喜欢做我们喜欢吃的食物。她是一个很喜欢吃甜食的人。我们始终有一个非常好的周末在一起。
我期待着拥有许多不错的回忆与我的家人。
我爱每一个人在我的家人。我爱我的甜蜜温暖的家。
the end 谢谢
应该要改成has

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My family
Hello, everyone! I’m proud to have a speech here.
I am fortunate to live in a very happy family. My mother and father care about me very much. We have a lot of fun together. My fath...

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My family
Hello, everyone! I’m proud to have a speech here.
I am fortunate to live in a very happy family. My mother and father care about me very much. We have a lot of fun together. My father is a teacher, he loves his job. My mother is a housewife. Everyday she has a lot of housework to do. In winter,although the weather is cold, our house is always very warm.
At the weekends, my father likes to read books and go fishing. He is good at fishing. My mother likes to cook interesting food for us. She has sweet tooth for tasting food. We always have a very nice weekend together.
I look forward to having a lot of nice memories with my family.
I love each person in my family. I love my sweet warm home.
That’s all.Thank you!

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1.proud to make改为proud of making
2.are very caring of 改为care a lot about me
3. my father like to 改为my father likes to
4.going fishing的going 删掉
5.cook us 的 us 删掉
6.She was a good ta...

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1.proud to make改为proud of making
2.are very caring of 改为care a lot about me
3. my father like to 改为my father likes to
4.going fishing的going 删掉
5.cook us 的 us 删掉
6.She was a good taste food for sweet tooth，不知你想表达什么。我认为改为 she has a good taste of food就行了

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