有谁能帮我批一下我的托福作文吗?最好能给些建议,我是今年的5月16号考托福Recently, people are becoming more and more willing to talk about how they solve problems with others .For example, with the easy access to computer

有谁能帮我批一下我的托福作文吗?最好能给些建议,我是今年的5月16号考托福Recently, people are becoming more and more willing to talk about how they solve problems with others .For example, with the easy access to computer
有谁能帮我批一下我的托福作文吗?最好能给些建议,我是今年的5月16号考托福
Recently, people are becoming more and more willing to talk about how they solve problems with others .For example, with the easy access to computer technology today ,people can tell others the way they solves problems through the internet. Also there are still many other ways to cope with the problem we encounter. As for me, I have several different kinds of ways to deal with the problems. One way is to ask my parents for help, the second is to ask for help from the internet .Or sometimes I solve the problem myself through constant efforts.
SO the first way I can use to solve the problems is by me because the problems are not very difficult for me to deal with. For example, when I meet with a math problem ,which is not my favorite subject, may be at the first sight I can not work it out ,however ,though my own efforts, I mean that I will spend more time to it and then I can solve it easily. This can give me a lot of precious experience because it is the problem that I solve it by my own.
Another way to is very different from the above/mention way .That is I will ask my parents for help because I believe that my parents are much more experienced than me ,so they can give me some good suggestion about how to cope with the problem. What's more, my parents are the persons who are the most familiar persons for me and they can understand me much better. Based on that their suggestion are more specific and can be very useful.
In addition to solving the problems myself and asking help from my parents ,I can also use the internet to solve the problems. For example ,when I want to get to know some information about where I can get a part/time job ,I can either to send the message online or to search some of the website to find some related information. To solve the problems through internet is the most frequent way I can use to work the problems out. This can not only save me much time but also can let me to solve problems much easier.
In conclusion, I think I have already had the best way to solve problems. And I think the combination of these ways is good when dealing with different types of problems.

有谁能帮我批一下我的托福作文吗?最好能给些建议,我是今年的5月16号考托福Recently, people are becoming more and more willing to talk about how they solve problems with others .For example, with the easy access to computer
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最近，人们越来越愿意谈论他们如何解决问题等。例如，容易获得计算机技术今天，人们可以告诉别人的方式解决问题，他们通过互联网。此外还有许多其他方式来应付我们所遇到的问题。至于我，我有多种不同的方式处理这一问题。一个办法是问我父母的帮助，二是要求帮助从互联网上。或有时我自己解决问题，通过不断的努力。
因此，首先，我可以使用它来解决问题是因为我的问题不是我很难处理。例如，当我遇到一个数学问题...

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最近，人们越来越愿意谈论他们如何解决问题等。例如，容易获得计算机技术今天，人们可以告诉别人的方式解决问题，他们通过互联网。此外还有许多其他方式来应付我们所遇到的问题。至于我，我有多种不同的方式处理这一问题。一个办法是问我父母的帮助，二是要求帮助从互联网上。或有时我自己解决问题，通过不断的努力。
因此，首先，我可以使用它来解决问题是因为我的问题不是我很难处理。例如，当我遇到一个数学问题，这不是我最喜欢的主题，可在第一次看见我不能工作了，然而，尽管我自己的努力，我的意思是，我将花更多的时间给它，然后我可以很容易地解决这个问题。这可以给我很多宝贵的经验，因为它是这个问题，我解决这个问题的我自己。
另一种方法是非常不同的从上述/提及的方式。这是我会请我的父母提供帮助，因为我相信我的父母更比我有经验，这样他们就可以给我一些很好的建议有关如何应付这个问题。更重要的是，我的父母是人谁是最熟悉的人，我和他们能够理解我的好多了。在此基础上他们的建议有更具体的和可以是非常有益的。
除了解决自己的问题和要求帮助我的父母，我还可以利用互联网来解决问题。例如，当我想知道一些信息，我可以得到的一部分/兼职工作，我可以发送邮件在线或搜索一些网站上找到一些有关的资料。为了解决这个问题，通过因特网是最常见的方式我可以用工作的问题了。这不仅可以节省我很多时间，而且还可以让我来解决问题要容易得多。
最后，我想我已经有最好的方式解决问题。我认为这些方法的结合是好的处理不同类型的问题。

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