各位来看一下这篇文章有没有错误March,8th,2005Today is Women’s Day .I want to do something made my mother happy.So I went to market as soon as leave school .I bought many food .for examples,fish,fruit,vegetable.I wanted to cook food wh

各位来看一下这篇文章有没有错误March,8th,2005Today is Women’s Day .I want to do something made my mother happy.So I went to market as soon as leave school .I bought many food .for examples,fish,fruit,vegetable.I wanted to cook food wh
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March,8th,2005
Today is Women’s Day .I want to do something made my mother happy.So I went to market as soon as leave school .I bought many food .for examples,fish,fruit,vegetable.I wanted to cook food what my mother like .and I finished the housework .I made everything clean.When I finished,felt tired very much.Now I can understand my mother was very hard.
I didn’t have supper until my mother cane back home.When she saw the clean house and much food on the table,the smile was with her face.

各位来看一下这篇文章有没有错误March,8th,2005Today is Women’s Day .I want to do something made my mother happy.So I went to market as soon as leave school .I bought many food .for examples,fish,fruit,vegetable.I wanted to cook food wh
Today is Women’s Day .
I want to do something (that will make) my mother happy.(Therefore,)I went to (the) market as soon as (i)leave school .I bought( alot of)food .(For) examples(:) fish,frui (and) vegetable.I wanted to cook (something which) my mother like and finished the housework .I made everything clean.When I finished,felt (so) tired.Now I can understand (why being a) mother was very (difficult).I didn’t have supper until my mother (come) back home.When she saw the clean house and much food on the table,the smile was with her face.
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March 8th,2005
Today is Women's Day.I had this plan on mind that i wanted to surprise my mum by doing all her chores for a day.Therefore,i went to the market nearby right after school.I ended up buying lots of food such as fish,fruits and vegetables.The plan was that i wanted to cook my mum's favourite dish,did the housework and cleaned up everything.It took me quite some time to finish it.I dint actually know that doing housework could be so tiring after all this while.Now,finally i can understand why being a mother is never easy.After all the preparation,i waited for mum to come back and have supper with me.When she reached home and saw all the things i have done for her,she was shocked and happy at the meantime.Well,i hope she had enjoyed the day,and i promise to help up with the chores from time to time.

March, 8th, 2005
Today is Women’s Day .I want to do something made my mother happy. So I went to the market as soon as left school .I bough many foods .For example, fish, fruit and vegetables. I...

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March, 8th, 2005
Today is Women’s Day .I want to do something made my mother happy. So I went to the market as soon as left school .I bough many foods .For example, fish, fruit and vegetables. I want to cook food what my mother likes and I finish the housework .I made everything clean. When I finished, felt tired very much. Now I can understand my mother was very hard.
I didn’t have supper until my mother came back home. When she saw the clean house and much food on the table, the smile was with her face

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3.I wanted to cook food what my mother like .what改成that
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