帮忙看一下这篇文章有没有什么错误?Please make good use of your lifeDear leaders teachers and schoolmates.Good morning!Today,my topic is“take care of your life,please.”A great person have said:Either you make good use of your life,o

帮忙看一下这篇文章有没有什么错误?Please make good use of your lifeDear leaders teachers and schoolmates.Good morning!Today,my topic is“take care of your life,please.”A great person have said:Either you make good use of your life,o
帮忙看一下这篇文章有没有什么错误?
Please make good use of your life
Dear leaders teachers and schoolmates.Good morning!
Today,my topic is“take care of your life,please.”
A great person have said:Either you make good use of your life,or your life makes use of you.a good heart is significant,it depends on who is hourse,who is hero.New term begins,you I and everyone else starts a new.This time is different from before.Maybe you haven’t found how hard it is,but there are more and more difficulties.Junior three is here.
Maybe we had successed yesterday,but that has been a good memery.Maybe we were in trouble,but that is the past.Forget it.
Dear schoolmates,study is hard,but don’t complain about the expection who cares of you.We need teaching.The most important thing is wherever we are,we should go ahead.We should dare to show our disadvangtages,make good use of our life.An Amerian president got the bad illness when he was a baby,nobody could understand his words,but he didn’t give up his dream.His activities made him win.
Perfect depends on drops.Education depends on drops.Life also depends on drops.Perfect,education,life will make up the most fascinating song.
As Xingling students we should treasure everyday to study.Let’s make good use of our life.Let’s fight for our bright future!
That’s all.Thank you!

帮忙看一下这篇文章有没有什么错误?Please make good use of your lifeDear leaders teachers and schoolmates.Good morning!Today,my topic is“take care of your life,please.”A great person have said:Either you make good use of your life,o
第四行："A great person have said",把have去掉
第六行"you I and everyone else starts a new"是个非常奇怪的表述,you和I可以不用写,这句可改为："everyone has a new start"
同样是第六行"This time is different from before",完全是汉语一个字一个字转过来的,语法不对,也不通.改为:"Today'situation is very different from yestory's".紧接着的“Maybe you haven’t found how hard it is”也不合适,"it is"不是随便就能用的,可能你们还没有学到这么深,但是一定要记住,"it"是个代名词,它的出现一定是用来指代上文中已经出现了的某或者明显的表明了的某件事情或者某个物品.还有,find是一种比较实体的找到,而这里你所要表示的是一种感受.所以,这一句可以改为"Maybe you haven't realized how hard our school life is"."Junior three is here"是什么意思?是想说“初三来临了”还是“现在初三了”?或许可以改为"We are facing our intense Junior Three."
下一段语法时态都不对,这个地方不是一种不会发生的假设,而是一种列举,所以不能用虚拟时态.可改为"some of us succeeded yesterday, but that was only a good memoray. Some of us met with trouble, but that is the past.Let's forget it."
没有" expection "这个词吧?期待者为“ expectant”.不明白“.We need teaching.The most important thing is wherever we are,we should go ahead”这两句是什么意思,不过肯定表述的不对."got the bad illness "改为"got a serious illness"
另外,开篇的时候那个伟人说的话应该是同学您自己翻译过来的吧?能不能把原来的话列出来我看一下,我觉得那句话不是很通.
以上,是我的分析,望能够帮到你~~