求大神改英语六级英语,并评分With the development of informationtechnology ,more and more E-books are coming to our life.Some books,whichare popular among teenagers and young people ,are always E-books.E-books havea large amount of funs .S

求大神改英语六级英语,并评分With the development of informationtechnology ,more and more E-books are coming to our life.Some books,whichare popular among teenagers and young people ,are always E-books.E-books havea large amount of funs .S
求大神改英语六级英语,并评分
With the development of informationtechnology ,more and more E-books are coming to our life.Some books,whichare popular among teenagers and young people ,are always E-books.E-books havea large amount of funs .
Someone think that E-books are having moreadvantages than traditional books .E-books can be taken everywhere you likefor its convince .In the second place ,E-books can be download from theInternet for free .Thus ,traditional books must be borrowed or bought fromthe library or the book store .In addition ,with the high price of wood ,thetraditional paper books become more and more expensive .The last but not theleast ,absorb knowledge from E-books can save more woods .So ,some peoplethink that the paper books would be replaced by E-books one day .
In my opinion ,I chose the E-books toenjoy myself when I’m busy and have a look of traditional books ,when I’m infree .I like the fleeing to touch books .

求大神改英语六级英语,并评分With the development of informationtechnology ,more and more E-books are coming to our life.Some books,whichare popular among teenagers and young people ,are always E-books.E-books havea large amount of funs .S
首先,英文离得标点符号是紧跟前一个单词的,不用空格.
其次,两个单词间有空格,请不要漏掉了.
With the development of information technology,more and more E-books are coming to our life.Books which are popular among teenagers and young people are mostly(mostly表示大多数,always表示总是,你原句应该是说畅销书中有一些是电子书还是说很多都是电子书?如果是有一些的话就把mostly改错sometimes) E-books.E-books have a large amount of funs.
Someone thinks（单三） that E-books,compared with paper books（比起传统书籍来说.好吧,我只是读不惯你原来的句子）,have （没必要用进行时）more advantages.E-books can be taken to(后面的everywhere是名词,不然不能用定语从句) everywhere you like （没有人会说“因为它很便利,所以可以带到各种地方”这种句子的,因为前后两句话意思一样）.In the second place,E-books can be downloaded（被动） from the Internet for free.Thus ,traditional books must be borrowed or bought from the library or the book store（看不懂,啥意思这句话,是说想看免费的纸质书只能去图书馆吗?是的话如下：However,if you want read free paper books,you could only go to the library or read at bookstores.这里应该是转折关系而不是因果）.In addition,the rocketing price of wood contributes to the raising price of traditional paper books.Last but not the least(前面没有the吧……),absorbing（动名词才能做主语） knowledge from E-books can help (间接帮助) protect forests(觉得保护森林听起来比省木头好听 = =).Therefore,some people think that paper books(泛指前面不用那个the) would be replaced by E-books one day .
To me,I enjoy（chose是过去式吧……） E-books when I’m busy and read(have a look of是嘛嘛短语,令人想起么?而且have a look at 如字面一样,真的只看一眼哟.) traditional books when I’m have a lot of time( = = in free 是在业余时间的意思,你这里应该是时间多的意思吧).I like the texture of paper books.（你原来是想用feeling么?）
话说,你这一篇文章大段的都在讲电子书的好处,最后突然峰回路转来句我喜欢纸书真的没问题么……一般应试作文不是应该只有一个鲜明的主题的么
不好意思,我没改过6级试卷,所以没评分.不过这篇应该还成吧,就是不该错的地方多了点.

满分10分
本篇写作 8.5分
写得不错 几乎没有语法错误
但 .traditional books are more friendly 传统书 更人性化 。应该体现
In my opinion , I chose the E-books to enjoy myself when I’m busy ，and have a look through traditi...

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满分10分
本篇写作 8.5分
写得不错 几乎没有语法错误
但 .traditional books are more friendly 传统书 更人性化 。应该体现
In my opinion , I chose the E-books to enjoy myself when I’m busy ，and have a look through traditional books when I’m free . I like the feeling of touching traditional books .
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