帮忙看下这句话哪儿错了吗?i never knew why i can not take my eyes off your face when i meet you everytime ,until today i just understood ,cuz when you turn and leave away i’ll miss you

帮忙看下这句话哪儿错了吗?i never knew why i can not take my eyes off your face when i meet you everytime ,until today i just understood ,cuz when you turn and leave away i’ll miss you
帮忙看下这句话哪儿错了吗?
i never knew why i can not take my eyes off your face when i meet you everytime ,until today i just understood ,cuz when you turn and leave away i’ll miss you

帮忙看下这句话哪儿错了吗?i never knew why i can not take my eyes off your face when i meet you everytime ,until today i just understood ,cuz when you turn and leave away i’ll miss you
i never knew why i can not take my eyes off your face when i meet you everytime ,until today i just understood ,cuz when you turn and leave away i’ll miss you
everytime 放到when前面
understood 改成understand

understood 改成understand, 直到今天啊，所以时态错了

时态不一致，我稍微改了下，让意思更加充实。
I never knew the reason why I can't took my eyes awawy from your face when I met you everytime, until today I understand it bacause I miss you already at the moment of your leaving.

i never knew why i can not take my eyes off your face when i meet you everytime ，until today i just understood ，cuz when you turn and leave away i’ll miss you
1. knew, understood 与 can，meet 时态不一致...

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i never knew why i can not take my eyes off your face when i meet you everytime ，until today i just understood ，cuz when you turn and leave away i’ll miss you
1. knew, understood 与 can，meet 时态不一致
2. can not不可分开写，中国学生的通病，改正：书面语cannot，口语can't
3. take off不可这样使用
4. until一般与not连用
5. 作为口语句，句子太长
6. turn arond
7. leave me away
8. everytime 放到when前面
9. cuz和when同为连接词，不可连在一起使用
I never knew why I couldn't keep my eyes off your face everytime when I met you. Today, I just understand, cuz I'll miss you when you turn around and leave me alone.

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I never knew why I could not take my eyes away from your face when we met until I found I would miss you when you turned around and left me alone

knew, understood 与 can，meet 时态不一致

意思是明明白白的，我们看看如何完善。
I never knew why I can not take my eyes off you when I was with you eachtime，until today I just understand，I miss you every minute when you are not with me.