求帮改英语作文,改出语法错误就好了,Maybe we often observe a peculiar phenomenon:more and more people will get marry after graduate rather than do other thing.It happens very frequently.Tomorrow maybe will happen on yourself.I hold the

求帮改英语作文,改出语法错误就好了,Maybe we often observe a peculiar phenomenon:more and more people will get marry after graduate rather than do other thing.It happens very frequently.Tomorrow maybe will happen on yourself.I hold the
求帮改英语作文,改出语法错误就好了,
Maybe we often observe a peculiar phenomenon:more and more people will get marry after graduate rather than do other thing.It happens very frequently.Tomorrow maybe will happen on yourself.
I hold the view that the reason why this phenomenon will occur is very explicit.Some parents want their descendant will mature quickly and they should have responsibility to other people;some parents have a vast hope that having a grandchild is very significant affair to enlarge their family.
In my opinion ,get marry is a serious affair in person's life.Having a happy marriage will decorate your life,however,if you have a unhappy marriage they will ruin your live and make everything go to dark.On the one hand ,marry earlier perhaps will save your time to struggle yourself to have a better life,because your beloved can take your half risks away.On the other hand ,marry earlier maybe is a doom,if you have a bad choice ,it will destroy your family ,your enterprise and your life.
Above all,regardless of getting marry earlier or not ,you should have a serious thinking before you make choice.

求帮改英语作文,改出语法错误就好了,Maybe we often observe a peculiar phenomenon:more and more people will get marry after graduate rather than do other thing.It happens very frequently.Tomorrow maybe will happen on yourself.I hold the
第一句得改,很中文腔
A peculiar phenomenon is very common in our daily life.
other thing改为other things
more and more people will get marry after graduate rather than do other thing.It happens very frequently.这句也有问题,
你就把It happens very frequently这句不要好了,多余
Tomorrow maybe will happen on yourself不懂什么意思额
I hold the view that the reason why this phenomenon will occur is very explicit.这句有问题,语法,句法,
改为I think it is clear about why this phenomenon occurs
Some parents want their descendant will mature quickly and they should have responsibility to other people这里的they有歧义,是指小孩,还是家长
Some parents look forward to the maturity of their children and hope their children have responsibilities.

would get married after graduation rather than do other things.

1. get marry > get married

2. graduate > graduation/graduating

3. thing > things

4. Tomorrow... > Tomorrow it may happen on you

5. d...

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   1. get marry > get married

   2. graduate > graduation/graduating

   3. thing > things

   4. Tomorrow... > Tomorrow it may happen on you

   5. descendant > + s

   6. will mature > get mature

   7. to other > for other

   8. get marry is a > getting married is a

   9. in person's life > in a person's life

   10. ruin your live > ruin your life

   11. go to dark > go to the dark

   12. maybe is a doom > may be a doom

   13. regardless of getting marry > regarding the matter of getting married 

   14. make choice > make a choice

   
   

   可能还有些错误，只改了明显的

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