英语作文求点评As we know ,many people in our country have begun to celebrate westtrn holidays.In my opinion ,this is not to good phenomenon. MOre and more developed in science and technology today ,the East and West cultural exchanges have b

英语作文求点评As we know ,many people in our country have begun to celebrate westtrn holidays.In my opinion ,this is not to good phenomenon. MOre and more developed in science and technology today ,the East and West cultural exchanges have b
英语作文求点评
As we know ,many people in our country have begun to celebrate westtrn holidays.In my opinion ,this is not to good phenomenon.
MOre and more developed in science and technology today ,the East and West cultural exchanges have become closer and spread more quickly.
In this circumstance, most of people will naturally think of western festivals without doubts.However, don't worry. As for us, we won't forget Chinese traditional festivals which require our protection.It's time to take measures for government.The government should take measures to protect our traditional festivels.
In a word, protecting the our traditional festivels is the duty of everyone.

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英语作文求点评As we know ,many people in our country have begun to celebrate westtrn holidays.In my opinion ,this is not to good phenomenon. MOre and more developed in science and technology today ,the East and West cultural exchanges have b
western拼错了,是打字的时候出错了吧~
this is not to good phenomenon是错句,改为this is not a good phenomenon .
MOre and more developed in science and technology today 是错句,改为With the rapid development of science and technology,建议把science,technology其中一个换成economy.
However,don't worry.最好写成However,don't worry that Chinese traditional festival will be forgotten.或指代稍清楚一点的句子.
As for us最好写成as we teenagers之类的能表明年龄段的或身份的.
In a word,protecting the our traditional festivels is the duty of everyone.最好稍加修饰、优化一下句子结构,让人看起来舒服一点（而且the和our不能共存啊）,最后再加一句倡导性的话,如In a word,it's everyone's duty to protect our traditional culture ,such as some festivals and customs.Let's do it from now on!
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总的来说,这篇文章思路较清晰,也用到了许多不错的词汇,只是有少量的错误、叙述需更流畅,虽拿不到满分,但仍不失为一篇不错的作文.
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