这是我的日记,June 13 Monday sunnyI'm the victim of a false alarm.I have feeled scared till now.I went out of home to bought some food in supermarket in this evening.I arrived at supermarket and then I went back to home.After I had arrived home

这是我的日记,June 13 Monday sunnyI'm the victim of a false alarm.I have feeled scared till now.I went out of home to bought some food in supermarket in this evening.I arrived at supermarket and then I went back to home.After I had arrived home
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June 13 Monday sunny
I'm the victim of a false alarm.I have feeled scared till now.
I went out of home to bought some food in supermarket in this evening.I arrived at supermarket and then I went back to home.After I had arrived home I played computer games.I couldn't find my key after I had finished computer game and want
June 13 Monday 's sunnyI'm victim of a of of alarm.I of false feeled of have till of scared went of now.I Me bought of to food of some supermarket of in this of in arrived of evening.I supermarket of at then of and I K home.After of to my had home of arrived I computer of played couldn't of games.I my of find after of key Shed game of computer want of and away.I asked them where my key is.But they said they didn't know.I was very anxious when I heared the word.My parents and I found my key but we found nothing again.I felt really sad.Fortunated,My Mum found it in my pants pocket.

这是我的日记,June 13 Monday sunnyI'm the victim of a false alarm.I have feeled scared till now.I went out of home to bought some food in supermarket in this evening.I arrived at supermarket and then I went back to home.After I had arrived home
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Line3 ……to do,bought改为buy
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Line4 home is an adverb(副词),前面不加介词to
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I was the victim of a false alarm.I felt scared so much.
I went out of home to buy some food in a nearby supermarket in this evening.After finishing my task,I went back home immediately.then I pla...

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I was the victim of a false alarm.I felt scared so much.
I went out of home to buy some food in a nearby supermarket in this evening.After finishing my task,I went back home immediately.then I played computer games.Just a moment later ,however,I found that I could not search for my keys anywhere.Worried and anxious,Iask my parent if they had seen my keys. But they said they didn't know.I felt even more anxious when I heared their disappoint words.My parents and I look for my keys with more care but we found nothing again.I felt really sad.At the end of the day,My Mum found them in my pants pocket.You can imagine how happy I was that moment!

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June 13 Monday，sunny
I'm the victim of a false alarm. I still fell terrible now and can’t calm down myself.
This evening I went out of home to buy some food in a supermarket.After I arrived at...

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June 13 Monday，sunny
I'm the victim of a false alarm. I still fell terrible now and can’t calm down myself.
This evening I went out of home to buy some food in a supermarket.After I arrived at the supermarket, buying what I need and then I went back home.After I arrived home I played computer games.But unluckily I couldn't find my key any more after I stopped playing computer games. I cried out and rushed to my parents’ bedroom. I asked them whether they had any idea about my key. But they said they didn't know. Hearing this, I was very anxious. Finally, My parents and I found my key nowhere but in my pants’ pocket.
把里面的句子理了下，但是好像还是有点问题，关键是你的整个叙事不是很清楚，一些细节性的东西无法给你改出来，只能大致改一下

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