雅思大作文 谁来帮我改改 都错在哪儿雅思大作文 题目是学生上课的内容应该由政府还是由学生自己来决定Schoolingis almost the mostimportance part of children’s growing up.A topic is being discussed by so the ge

雅思大作文 谁来帮我改改 都错在哪儿雅思大作文 题目是学生上课的内容应该由政府还是由学生自己来决定Schoolingis almost the mostimportance part of children’s growing up.A topic is being discussed by so the ge
雅思大作文 谁来帮我改改 都错在哪儿
雅思大作文
题目是学生上课的内容应该由政府还是由学生自己来决定
Schoolingis almost the mostimportance part of children’s growing up.A topic is being discussed by so the general public is that which can decidecourse content for children.
Some people think that pupils have the right to decideall kinds of lessons’ content they want.Individualstudents have different personalities.So students can not be attracted by certain curriculum and give up to attend the lecture if they don’t like it.Soit also can limits pupils’ potential and leadto lose their confidence,because there arenothing attractive and can be challenged during the class.
Others think,whatever,the government should make decision about content of lecture.Because government’sdecision is more scientific and objective,students’ personal management frequently is not enough strong and theycan make the certain class disappear which is unwelcome if they can choose classes as their wishes.Additionally,educationist will design more perfect decision to adopt to schooling.Amongthese,ministry of education also play a the mostimportant role.
My own view is that the government decision is helpful for schooling; however educationists should acquire pupils’ wishes increasingly.As for students,they need to reflect education questions in time to related ministry.Simultaneously,they should try to preferably plan their time for studying study and rest.Only in this way canhelp students to study more efficiently.

雅思大作文 谁来帮我改改 都错在哪儿雅思大作文 题目是学生上课的内容应该由政府还是由学生自己来决定Schoolingis almost the mostimportance part of children’s growing up.A topic is being discussed by so the ge
==低级语法错误太多,important part,a topic has being discussed,还有什么叫so the general public?开头就一堆错,文中语法错误也不少,不列举了,回去自己挑错.别一味求高级语法,我帮别人改作文经常因为这个郁闷,用起来高级语法要么不适合,要么不对,要么有不适合又不对,先求无错再说；
单词太单调,高级词汇特别是形容词副词数量不足,而且简单词汇重复率太高；
逻辑架构很一般,因为思维差异,中国考生这部分一向不强,所以建议多用连词衔接.你连词用的过少而且太低级,一直so,so,整体文章衔接很不严密,好多句子读起来很突兀
文章内容观点还可以,论点论述都有而且没啥错误,不过论述展开一般.倒没啥问题,就是写作句法要加强.其他三项多下功夫吧