请帮忙检查下有没有错误：）I will write diary in English everyday from now on.this is a good way to protect my diary ,beacuse when someone read it ,he will can't understand me clearly,not all my colleague and friends good at english,they

请帮忙检查下有没有错误：）I will write diary in English everyday from now on.this is a good way to protect my diary ,beacuse when someone read it ,he will can't understand me clearly,not all my colleague and friends good at english,they
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I will write diary in English everyday from now on.this is a good way to protect my diary ,beacuse when someone read it ,he will can't understand me clearly,not all my colleague and friends good at english,they will do not patiently read these words.
I rent a room underground yesterday,because it is cheep and close to my office.i can go to my office in walk.
there are many houses near my office,but they are too expensive to me,i'm a poor man,at least by now.but i'm working hard for food and future.i sent a message to my girl friend tell her that i will go to bed early and get up early.so i'll be energitic when doing my work.
i printed the speech 'i have a dream',plan to read it every morning in this week.
in this room i'll start a new life.
there are lots of words i want to write,but i can't find the words i need.i will study english hard:)

请帮忙检查下有没有错误：）I will write diary in English everyday from now on.this is a good way to protect my diary ,beacuse when someone read it ,he will can't understand me clearly,not all my colleague and friends good at english,they
I will write diary in English everyday from now on.This is a good way to protect my diary(diary我觉得应该改成privacy,因为你要保护的不是日记,而是你的隐私) ,beacuse when someone read it ,he will can't(我把will can't改成couldn't,英文里没有你的这种说法) understand me clearly,not all my colleague and friends (前面加are,固定搭配,be good at)good at english,they will do not(will do not 改成would not,后面再加个系动词be) patiently read these words.
I rent a room underground yesterday,because it is cheep(cheap,拼写错误) and close to my office.i can go to my office in walk(on foot).
there are many houses near my office,but they are too expensive to me,i'm a poor man,at least by now.but(我觉得改成While比较好,前面用了But最好不要再重复了) i'm working hard for food and future.i sent a message to my girl friend (加to ,表示动词不定式)tell her that i will go to bed early and get up early.so i'll(will改成would be 比较好) energitic when doing my work.
i printed the speech 'i have a dream',plan(planning,动词+ING在句首表示状态) to read it every morning in(去掉in,多余) this week.
in this room i'll start a new life.
there are lots of words i want to write,but i can't find the words i need.i will study english hard:)
还需加油哦.注意自己的表达方式

I will write diary in English everyday from now on. It is a good way to protect my secrets,beacuse when someone read it,he would not understand me clearly,not all my colleagues and friends are good at...

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I will write diary in English everyday from now on. It is a good way to protect my secrets,beacuse when someone read it,he would not understand me clearly,not all my colleagues and friends are good at English, they will not patiently read these words.
I rent a underground room yesterday, because it is cheep and close to my office. I can get to my office on foot.
There are many apartments near my office, but they are too expensive to me, i'm a poor man, at least by now. but i'm working hard for food and future. i sent a message to my girl friend telling her that i will go to bed early and get up early. so i'll be energitic with my work.
i printed the speech 'i have a dream',plan to read it every morning in this week.
in this room i'll start a new life.
there are much i want to write,but i can't find the words.i will study english hard:)
稍微给你改了一下，有问题可以再找我，呵呵

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I will write diary in English everyday from now on. This is a good way to protect my diary ,beacuse when someone read it ,he can't understand me clearly. Not all my colleague and friends are good at e...

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I will write diary in English everyday from now on. This is a good way to protect my diary ,beacuse when someone read it ,he can't understand me clearly. Not all my colleague and friends are good at english, they will not read these words patiently.
I rent a room underground yesterday, because it is cheap and close to my office. I can go to my office on foot.
There are many houses near my office, but they are too expensive for me. I'm a poor man, at least by now. However, I'm working hard for food and my future career.
I sent a message to my girlfriend to tell her that i would go to bed early and get up early. so i'll be energitic while doing my work.
i printed the speech 'i have a dream',planed to read it every morning this week.
in this room i'll start a new life.
there are lots of words i want to write,but i can't find the words i need.i will study english hard:)

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diary改为a diary;
protect 改为protecting;
“beacuse when someone read it ,he will can't understand me clearly”改为“when someone read it,he can't clearly understand the diary ”
colleague改为colleagu...

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diary改为a diary;
protect 改为protecting;
“beacuse when someone read it ,he will can't understand me clearly”改为“when someone read it,he can't clearly understand the diary ”
colleague改为colleagues;
good at改为are good at;
rent改为rented;
cheep改为cheap;
"i can go to my office in walk"改为"I can go to my office by walk.";
"i sent a message to my girl friend tell her that i will go to bed early and get up early. "改为"I sent a message to my girl friend to tell her that i will get up early.";
energitic改为energic；
i printed the speech 'i have a dream',plan to read it every morning in this week. 改为 "I printed the speech manuscript named "I have a dream",planning to read it every morning in this week.";

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I will write diary in English everyday from now on. It is a good way to protect my secrets,beacuse when someone read it,he would not understand me clearly,not all my colleagues and friends are good at...

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I will write diary in English everyday from now on. It is a good way to protect my secrets,beacuse when someone read it,he would not understand me clearly,not all my colleagues and friends are good at English, they will not patiently read these words.
I rent a underground room yesterday, because it is cheep and close to my office. I can get to my office on foot.
There are many apartments near my office, but they are too expensive to me, i'm a poor man, at least by now. but i'm working hard for food and future. i sent a message to my girl friend telling her that i will go to bed early and get up early. so i'll be energitic with my work.
i printed the speech 'i have a dream',plan to read it every morning in this week.
in this room i'll start a new life.
there are much i want to write,but i can't find the words.i will study english hard:)

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,not all my colleague and friends good at english, 少了动词be good at
in walk -----on foot
i sent a message to my girl friend (tell) her that i will go to bed early and get up early. ----telling

From now on I will make a habit of writing my diary in English everyday . This is a good way to keep my privacy because in case somebody happens to look at my diary, he or she won't be able to underst...

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From now on I will make a habit of writing my diary in English everyday . This is a good way to keep my privacy because in case somebody happens to look at my diary, he or she won't be able to understand it.None of my colleagues or my friends are good at English, They have no patienc to read these words.
I rented a room in the basement yesterday. It is cheaper and it is close to my office. I can go there on foot.
There are many houses near my office, but they are all very expensive. I'm a poor man, at least at the moment. I work hard to support myself and I work very hard for a better future. I sent a message to my girl friend telling her that I will go to bed early and get up early. so that I will be energetic when I work.(I will sleep tight, wake up bright and to do what is right with all my might.)
I printed out the speech "I have a dream".I want to read it every morning this week.
I'll start a new life.I feel like I have lots
of things to pour into my diary,but I can't find the right words I need.I will try very hard to study English.
Hi! I made some corrections. Hope you like it. Actually you did a pretty good job! Keep up the good job!

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