批改英语四级作文In recent years, more and more large-scale pressure were poured on the college students,flowing the importance of huan resources.We，colleges tudents，realized the society that is full of factors of competition, which can

批改英语四级作文In recent years, more and more large-scale pressure were poured on the college students,flowing the importance of huan resources.We，colleges tudents，realized the society that is full of factors of competition, which can
批改英语四级作文

In  recent years, more and more large-scale pressure were poured on the college students,flowing the importance of huan resources.We，colleges tudents，realized the society  that is full of factors of competition, which can hardly step a step into the current society.

the evil pressure truly gave a prosperitily competative human-resource market for every field in society,hence,there was a age-old saying ,which is called "a coin has two sides". excessive pressure did really make a "contribution" to the occurence rate of mental disease.for instant, occurence of  autism rate are incresinglly happend in graduates. the extramely high rate is  of our human-resouce which should be saved for other field as well.

therefore,from my point of view,firstly, to poen the mental health class can greatly relieve the burden of our competitive environment ,secondly,to do some preworks in the eve of the competative society is also plays a vita

批改英语四级作文In recent years, more and more large-scale pressure were poured on the college students,flowing the importance of huan resources.We，colleges tudents，realized the society that is full of factors of competition, which can
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In recent years,more and more large-scale pressure【 pressures,不然后面用 was ,pressure 用单复数都可以.】 were poured on the【the 不用】 college students,flowing【?应该用 reflecting 吧,“反应,说明”】 the importance of huan【human】 resources.We,colleges tudents,realized【must realize,这里应该用一般现在时】 the society that is full of factors of competition,which can hardly step a step into the current society.【这句句法有点问题,建议改为 We ,college students ,feel obliged to be aware of the fierce competition in society 】
The evil【evil 一般只修饰 devil 吧 …… 太偏激了点……用“serious”好点 】 pressure truly gave 【gives】a prosperitily competative【competitive】 human-resource market for every field in society,hence,there was a age-old saying 【an old saying】 ,which is called "a coin has two sides".【改为 as an old saying quotes,"every coin has its two sides"】 excessive pressure did【does】 really make a "contribution" to the occurence rate of mental disease.for instant,occurence of autism rate are incresinglly happend in graduates.the extramely high rate is of our human-resouce which should be saved for other field as well.
therefore,from my point of view,firstly,to poen【?没有这个词…】 the mental health class can greatly relieve the burden of our competitive environment ,secondly,to do 【to do 改为 doing】 some preworks in the eve of the competative society is also plays a vital
role.