帮忙改下我写的英语小作文吧describe an event you feel disappointedWell, to be honest, I still remember the first time I failed my math test. I really like math and I also love my math teacher, Miss Shi. But I failed this time, I can't hel

帮忙改下我写的英语小作文吧describe an event you feel disappointedWell, to be honest, I still remember the first time I failed my math test. I really like math and I also love my math teacher, Miss Shi. But I failed this time, I can't hel
帮忙改下我写的英语小作文吧
describe an event you feel disappointed
Well, to be honest, I still remember the first time I failed my math test. I really like math and I also love my math teacher, Miss Shi. But I failed this time, I can't help with my sad tears. However, my math teacher heard this message, and she believed me. She always think her best student is me, don't cry for only one fail test and try to find out the mistakes to do better next time.

帮忙改下我写的英语小作文吧describe an event you feel disappointedWell, to be honest, I still remember the first time I failed my math test. I really like math and I also love my math teacher, Miss Shi. But I failed this time, I can't hel
Time passing,the memory of the first time i failed in my maths still remains.I liked maths as much as loved my maths teacher,Miss Shi.I did very well in the past.But at a time,i failed in maths,which made me cry for a long time.Miss shi saw me crying in the corner of the classroom.She came to me and said she believed me i can do much better,because I,the best one in her eyes,worked hard and was enthusiastic in maths at all time.So i think,we shouldn't cry for a single fail.Try our best and find the mistakes.We could be what we want to be.

best student is me??
应该说me is student

不需要修改了，我认为写得很好

I still remember the first time I failed （in)my math test
But I failed this time=(but during that time of my failure)
I can't help with my sad tears 你想说你伤心的眼泪情不自禁吧？
起码也要换下主语额
it can...

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I still remember the first time I failed （in)my math test
But I failed this time=(but during that time of my failure)
I can't help with my sad tears 你想说你伤心的眼泪情不自禁吧？
起码也要换下主语额
it can't help with my sad tears
and she believed me. She always think her best student is me
这样描述不行,语句不连贯，很土额，还有部分语病。 换成这样吧
she always believe that i am the best student of hers and tell me not to cry ,because it just be a failed test and you have better try to find out the mistakes next time.
花了我快10分钟的时间额。。如果还有什么不懂可以问我。＝，＝
希望我的修改能帮助到您！

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