请帮我修改下我的作文,包括各项错误 和 更好的改进!Hello everyone!I'm PYL（my name） .I'm so glad to have the opportunity to make a speech about medical insurance.It is well known that our country has found a series of policies.T

请帮我修改下我的作文,包括各项错误 和 更好的改进!Hello everyone!I'm PYL（my name） .I'm so glad to have the opportunity to make a speech about medical insurance.It is well known that our country has found a series of policies.T
请帮我修改下我的作文,包括各项错误 和 更好的改进!
Hello everyone!I'm PYL（my name） .I'm so glad to have the opportunity to make a speech about medical insurance.
It is well known that our country has found a series of policies.These policies mainly as below:
The new rural cooperative medical insurance system and the basic medical insurance for urban residents.
Every year I will pay 20 yuan for medical insurance actively.Even though I have not enjoy the benefit from this policy.Of course,every one must dislike it.I think insurance is based on the idea "One for all,all for one." I support this policy.
Some one who knows it better complaints shortcomings of this policy.Such as inefficiency,difficulty in procedure ,Rising price and even Corruption.
In fact more and more people benefit from this policy,Major diseases will be cured benefit from it.
[Truely],various problems at present and challenges in the way ahead.At least,our country improving it.
In my humble opinion,it is easier to prevent than to cure the disease later.As a College student,we need to have more consideration for public.
请尽快修改，明天下午就上台演讲了。（小型的 班级内的演讲）
演讲主题 就是关于我国的医疗保障制度！
关于 xdx9900 我的本意不是这个意思的！
意思是：你从医保获益，肯定是你得病了或者更糟糕的情况，所以我宁愿不获此利益，也不愿得病...这个意思。但可能我表达的不是太好吧，你理解错了！既幽默又语义清晰。

请帮我修改下我的作文,包括各项错误 和 更好的改进!Hello everyone!I'm PYL（my name） .I'm so glad to have the opportunity to make a speech about medical insurance.It is well known that our country has found a series of policies.T
Hello everyone! I'm PYL（my name） .I'm so glad to have the opportunity to make a speech about OUR medical insurance.
It is well known that our country has found a series of policies.These policies ARE mainly as THE FOLLOWINGS:
The new rural cooperative medical insurance system and the basic medical insurance for urban residents.
Every year I will pay 20 yuanS for medical insurance TO KEEP IT ACTIVE, Even though I have not enjoyED the benefit from this policy.Of course, every one must dislike it. BUT I think insurance is based on the idea "One for all, all for one." SO, I support this policy.
SOMEONE who knows it better complainS ABOUT THE shortcomings of this policy, such as inefficiency, difficult PROCEDURES, rising priceS and even corruption.
In fact, more and more people ARE benefitING from this policy, Major diseases will be cured WITH ITS benefitS.
[Truely], THERE ARE various problems at present and challenges ON the way ahead. At least,our country IS improving it.
In my humble opinion, it is easier to prevent A DISEASE than to cure IT later.As a college student,we need to have more consideration for THE public.

1.Every year I pay 20 yuan for THE medical insurance actively, even though I have not ENJOYED ANY benefit from this policy.
2."Of course,every one must dislike."— I suspect the other [n. students?...

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1.Every year I pay 20 yuan for THE medical insurance actively, even though I have not ENJOYED ANY benefit from this policy.
2."Of course,every one must dislike."— I suspect the other [n. students?colleagues?] get sick of it either.
3. I USED TO think THE insurance is based on the idea "One for all, all for one." WHICH I supported. 意思是过去是你喜欢，现在不是了。(根据你前面说你不喜欢它)
4.Some one who knows it better complaints THE shortcomings of this policy.
5. "Such as inefficiency, DIFFICULTIES in OPERATION ,Rising PRICES and even Corruption." procedure是具象性词， price 就一个价格吗？就是the rising price
6.In fact, more and more people ARE BENEFITING from this policy— Major diseases HAVE BEEN cured, though THERE ARE various problems STILL EXSITING and challenges STILL GETING IN THE WAY.
7. it is easier to prevent DISEASES RATHER than to cure, SO WE'D PUT EMPHASISE ON DEFENDING OURSELVES AGAINT DISEASES （因为是eaiser，所以我就糟了半句。改成easy, so…就不需要了）
8. As a College student,we need more CONSIDERATIONS for THE HEALTH of the public.

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