请帮我看一下这段英文有么有语法错误~(英语帝进~)估计一定挺多的 错的帮我改一下 Hi DadWhen you told me you will take me travel to somewhere in China,I was so excited that cannot sleep,go travel for holiday is always my

请帮我看一下这段英文有么有语法错误~(英语帝进~)估计一定挺多的 错的帮我改一下 Hi DadWhen you told me you will take me travel to somewhere in China,I was so excited that cannot sleep,go travel for holiday is always my
请帮我看一下这段英文有么有语法错误~(英语帝进~)
估计一定挺多的 错的帮我改一下
Hi Dad
When you told me you will take me travel to somewhere in China,I was so excited that cannot sleep,go travel for holiday is always my dream,especially with you and my mum ,If we can stay together and enjoy the beautiful view,I will feel really happy.
Because of the winter,so Dalian'temperature is cold,I think our winter holiday will by the end of January,when the students in Singapore have holiday,ah,anyway if I can see you again,that's the best thing~
Please look after youself and have good mod everyday
o(>﹏

请帮我看一下这段英文有么有语法错误~(英语帝进~)估计一定挺多的 错的帮我改一下 Hi DadWhen you told me you will take me travel to somewhere in China,I was so excited that cannot sleep,go travel for holiday is always my
when you told me you would take me to travel to somewhere in china, I was so excited that I cannot sleep. Going travelling for holiday is always my dream, especially with you and my mum, if we can stay together and enjoy the beautiful view, I will feel real happy.
Because of the winter, the weather in Dalian is cold, I think our winter holiday will start by the end of January. when the students in Singapore are on holiday, ah, anyway if I can see you again, that's the best thing
please take care yourself and have a good mood everyday
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Hi Dad
When you told me you [would] take me [to] travel [in] somewhere in China, I was so excited that [I couldn't] sleep[.] [Traveling] [in] holiday is always my dream, especially with you and mu...

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Hi Dad
When you told me you [would] take me [to] travel [in] somewhere in China, I was so excited that [I couldn't] sleep[.] [Traveling] [in] holiday is always my dream, especially with you and mum[.] If we can stay together and enjoy the beautiful view,I will feel really happy.~
Because [it's now] winter, Dalian's [weather] is cold[.] I think our winter holiday will [come] by the end of January,when the students in Singapore have holiday[.] Ah,anyway if I can see you again [soon],that [will be] the best thing~
Please look after youself and have good [mood] everyday
o(>﹏<)o Good night

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Hi Dad
When you told me that you would take me to travel somewhere in China,I was so excited that could not sleep, travelling on holiday is my dream for a long time ,especially with you and my m...

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Hi Dad
When you told me that you would take me to travel somewhere in China,I was so excited that could not sleep, travelling on holiday is my dream for a long time ,especially with you and my mum ,If we can stay together and enjoy the beautiful view,I will feel really happy.~
Because of winter's coming , Dalian'temperature is low,I think our winter holiday will start by the end of January,when the students in Singapore have holiday,ah,anyway if I can see you again,that's really great!
Please take care of youself and have good mod everyday
o(>﹏<)o Good night

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