帮我看看 我给一教授的英文信 这样能成么I am really glad to have your letter in reply,Thank you so much for your time and all you have done for me.Because i am work for a art festival here in China those years .(I am the one of the cu

帮我看看 我给一教授的英文信 这样能成么I am really glad to have your letter in reply,Thank you so much for your time and all you have done for me.Because i am work for a art festival here in China those years .(I am the one of the cu
帮我看看 我给一教授的英文信 这样能成么
I am really glad to have your letter in reply,Thank you so much for your time and all you have done for me.
Because i am work for a art festival here in China those years .(I am the one of the curator),I earn some money from it .so I think I can support myself in the university during the dissertation research time .
For the dissertation theme .I think I can write more things and change some place to make the idea more clearly .if you can give me some further advice ,I will be very appreciate .

帮我看看 我给一教授的英文信 这样能成么I am really glad to have your letter in reply,Thank you so much for your time and all you have done for me.Because i am work for a art festival here in China those years .(I am the one of the cu
我把感觉需要改动的地方写在后面的括号里,并附上自己的建议.开头和结尾一般很模式化的,可以找一些直接套上去用.
I am really glad to have（receive） your letter in reply（觉得in reply可以省略）,Thank you so much for your time and all you have done for me.
Because i am work(i've been working) for a(an) art festival here in China those(these) years .(I am the one of the curator)(i am one of the curators there这里你要表示什么意思呢,我的翻译是表示我是这里的一名curator),I earn some money from it .so I think I can support myself in the university during the dissertation research time .
For(in terms of) the dissertation theme .I think I can write more things（things可以去掉） and change some place(places)（这句话也可以改成 and make some changes会更地道） to make the idea more clearly(clearer,more去掉,使意思更清楚用形容词,或者也可用and present the idea more clearly) .if you can give me some further advice ,I will be very appreciate .(i would really appreciate it if you can give me some further advice ).|(或者也可用i would be very grateful if you can...)

I am really glad to have(receive更正宗一些） your letter in reply, Thank you so much for your time and all you have done for me.
Because i am work(working) for a （an)art festival here in China those (t...

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I am really glad to have(receive更正宗一些） your letter in reply, Thank you so much for your time and all you have done for me.
Because i am work(working) for a （an)art festival here in China those (these)years . (I am the (加一个only吧，这样更清楚） one of the curator), I earn some money from it .so I think I can support myself in the university during the dissertation research time .
For (改成When talking about)the dissertation theme . I think I can write more things(things 就不用了） and change some place（places) to make the idea more clearly （more clearly改成clear，如果你非要强调“更清楚”就用clearer）. if（If） you can give me some further advice , I will be very appreciate

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首先。你要注意格式问题
开头结尾有些固定的句子
最好是到网上找一些英文书信学习一下吧

很多错误啊... 你要好好学习英文... 不过你的口语应该还凑合

支持一楼的,找个bug,最后一句 I will be very appreciate .应该是 I will appreciate very much.