帮我看一下这篇初一的英语作文有什么问题(1)SwimmingYearstoday was very hot .The temperature reach 39.7℃.I could stand it,so I went to a swimming pool with my friends---Ted,Mike and Jake.We all though swimming could us stay healthy.

帮我看一下这篇初一的英语作文有什么问题(1)SwimmingYearstoday was very hot .The temperature reach 39.7℃.I could stand it,so I went to a swimming pool with my friends---Ted,Mike and Jake.We all though swimming could us stay healthy.
帮我看一下这篇初一的英语作文有什么问题
(1)
Swimming
Yearstoday was very hot .The temperature reach 39.7℃.I could stand it,so I went to a swimming pool with my friends---Ted,Mike and Jake.We all though swimming could us stay healthy.I loved swimming，because when I stayed in the water.I could feel cool.The day，I and my friends played water.I defeated Ted and Mike,bet Jake defeated me.
I thought played water was interesting and exerciting.We had fun in
the water!
(2)
total solar eclipse
July 22rd,2009 was a especial date.It had a total eclipse of the sun!This time the total eclipse of the sun is longest in a century.If you were in Hangzhou,you could see it,so many people went to the best place---Tianhuangping.I thought the total eclipse of the sun was very grand.I wanted to see it,but that day,I had a English lesson.I have to watch TV for saw it.
I fell sorry for myself.

帮我看一下这篇初一的英语作文有什么问题(1)SwimmingYearstoday was very hot .The temperature reach 39.7℃.I could stand it,so I went to a swimming pool with my friends---Ted,Mike and Jake.We all though swimming could us stay healthy.
"Yearstoday"单词错误“yesterday",第一句也可以像上面说的,该一下比较好,变为“It's very hot yestoday”,
reach后缺少介词,可加to,
“i could stand it"是我能忍受的意思,"could"改为"couldn't",
"though"是通过的意思,应该是“thought"认为,
“swimming could us stay healthy”应改为“swimming could make us keep healthy"(情态动词could后要跟动词,不能直接跟名词“swimming"),“loved"改为"love"表示一般行为,不用过去式,
“played water"都改为"played in the water",
“bet"应该是“but”表示但是吧?!
“I thought played water was interesting and exerciting.We had fun in
the water!”改为“
I thought that playing in the water was interesting and execiting.We are very happy!
实在抱歉,没有时间看下面的文章了,上面的文章也只是尽力改了,应该没有问题了,如果还有错,就不好意思了!
下面的文章我直接改了~有什么不懂的再问我吧,仅供参考啊~
July 22,2009,it was a special day,because the day had a beautiful sight--the total solar eclipse.
(especial是“尤其是”的意思,可能也有特别的意思吧,但不经常用!special是“特别”的意思.sight“风景”)
This is a longest total solar eclipse in the century.If you were in Hangzhou,you could see it clearly（clearly“清楚地”）.So many people went to the best place--Tianhuangping to see the special sight.I thought the total solar eclipse must be(一定) very buautiful and grand.I wanted to see it ,but I had an (元音前用an哦)English lesson in that day.So I couldn't see it personally（亲眼）But I could see it in television,I also felt it very spectacular(壮观).I feel very regretful(遗憾),but I really hope I can see it again by myself.
可能还会有错,但我已经尽力了,可能改了一些,也加了一些~

第一句应该是It's very hot yestoday.你几乎是中文式英语啊！
“so I went to a swimming pool with my friends---Ted,Mike and Jake.”很夸张啊！应该是so I went to swimming with my friends,there're Ted,Mike and Jack.额..改不下去了

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Swimming
Yearstoday was very hot .The temperature reached 39.7℃. I could stand it,so I went to a swimming pool with my friends---Ted,Mike and Jake.We all thought swimming could make us stay healthy.I loved swimming，because while I stayed in the water.I could feel cool.The day，I and my friends played water.I defeated Ted and Mike,but Jake defeated me.
I thought playing water was interesting and exerciting.We had fun in
the water!
total solar eclipse
July 22rd,2009 was a especial date.It had a total eclipse of the sun! This time the total eclipse of the sun is the longest in a century.If you were in Hangzhou,you could see it,many people went to the best place---Tianhuangping.I thought the total eclipse of the sun was very grand.I wanted to see it,but that day,I had a English lesson.I had to watch TV for seeing it.
I felt sorry for myself

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