麻烦英语好的谁能帮我看看这个语法有没有什么错误,能不能顺利读通,如果不通,麻烦帮我改改,First,this opportunity can broaden my horizons.Second,this opportunity can let me know how to different culture,and to make mo

麻烦英语好的谁能帮我看看这个语法有没有什么错误,能不能顺利读通,如果不通,麻烦帮我改改,First,this opportunity can broaden my horizons.Second,this opportunity can let me know how to different culture,and to make mo
麻烦英语好的谁能帮我看看这个语法有没有什么错误,能不能顺利读通,如果不通,麻烦帮我改改,
First,this opportunity can broaden my horizons.Second,this opportunity can let me know how to different culture,and to make more different friends.Finally,the opportunity to fully develop my oral English.So I cherish the opportunity,I also want to add to this activity.Thank you.

麻烦英语好的谁能帮我看看这个语法有没有什么错误,能不能顺利读通,如果不通,麻烦帮我改改,First,this opportunity can broaden my horizons.Second,this opportunity can let me know how to different culture,and to make mo
First,this opportunity can broaden my horizon.Second,this opportunity can let me know different cultures better to make more friends.Finally,the opportunity can fully improve my oral English.So I cherish this opportunity and want to take part in the activity.Thank you.
或者顺序变一下也行I value this opportunity because the following reasons.
First,it can broaden my horizon.Second,it can let me know different cultures better to make more friends.Finally,it can fully improve my oral English.Therefore I'd like to take part in the activity.Thank you.

...let me know (how to删掉，否则缺动词) different culture, and（前面的how to删掉，这里加个how） to make more different friends. Finally, the opportunity to(少动词，把to删掉，改成can) fully develop my oral English. So I cherish the...

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...let me know (how to删掉，否则缺动词) different culture, and（前面的how to删掉，这里加个how） to make more different friends. Finally, the opportunity to(少动词，把to删掉，改成can) fully develop my oral English. So I cherish the opportunity, I also want to add to（add to是物理上的增加，参加活动用 join in 或 take part in） this activity. Thank you.

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First of all, this opportunity can broaden my life experience. Secondly, it can help me understand diverse cultures and make more foreign friends. Finally, this opportunity can improve my spoken English a lot as well. Therefore, I really cherish this opportunity and would like to participate in this event. Thank you.

First, this opportunity can broaden my horizons. Second, this opportunity can let me know what different cultures are, and make more foreign friends. Last but not least， this opportunity make me capable of fully developing my oral English. So I really appreciate this opportunity, I am keen to jion in this activity. Thank you.

First【First of all】, this opportunity can broaden my horizons【horizon】. Second, this opportunity can let me know how to different culture, and to make more different friends【Second, I could have oppor...

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First【First of all】, this opportunity can broaden my horizons【horizon】. Second, this opportunity can let me know how to different culture, and to make more different friends【Second, I could have opportunity to get in touch with different culture and make new foreign friends.】. Finally, the opportunity to fully develop my oral English【Finally, it is a good chance for me to improve my oral English.】. So【去掉】 I cherish the opportunity 【very much.】【So】I also want to add to this activity【I would like to attend this wonderful activity】.【I am looking forward to your answer.】 Thank you!
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First of all, this opportunity can broaden my horizon. Second, I could have opportunity to get in touch with different culture and make new foreign friends. Finally, it is a good chance for me to improve my oral English. I cherish the opportunity very much.So，I would like to attend this wonderful activity.I am looking forward to your answer. Thank you!

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First of all, this opportunity can broaden my horizon. Second, I could have opportunity to get in touch with different culture and make new foreign friends. Finally, it is a good chance for me to impr...

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First of all, this opportunity can broaden my horizon. Second, I could have opportunity to get in touch with different culture and make new foreign friends. Finally, it is a good chance for me to improve my oral English. I cherish the opportunity very much.So，I would like to attend this wonderful activity.I am looking forward to your answer. Thank you!

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