求英语语法 帝 帮忙check 下 Thanks for your giving!From my point of view,some people hold the opinion that people should follow the dream.However other people hold the negative attitude.As far as I am concerned ,I agree with some people shoul

求英语语法 帝 帮忙check 下 Thanks for your giving!From my point of view,some people hold the opinion that people should follow the dream.However other people hold the negative attitude.As far as I am concerned ,I agree with some people shoul
求英语语法 帝 帮忙check 下 Thanks for your giving!
From my point of view,some people hold the opinion that people should follow the dream.However other people hold the negative attitude.As far as I am concerned ,I agree with some people should focus to achieve the realistic goal.
Some people think that idealism object is best way to achieve them self-actualize and also can cultivate them spirit of preserve to do everything.For example,we know that some typical case from famous people,such as a Steve jobs .Every body knows Iphone is from his company.Actually,his successful is not easily.Because Steve who was born a poor family,and he also was an orphan when he was child.However he never gave up his dream that becoming a great CEO.Finally,the Steve jobs achieved his dream that creating the greatest company-APPLE around the world.
Second and foremost,I think if I can achieve my object through realistic to finish it.It can help me to cultivate my self-confidence.Because these realistic success can let me know that achieving these dreams are not difficult.It can enhance your self-confidence to do everything.For instance,I was afraid of swim when I was a kid.Until,my father told me that swimming a little step every time for me.Gradually,I had learned swam and taste the benefits of victory to me.In the end,I was interested in this sports.
To sum up,maybe there are a few people can achieve ideal dream to them.However,most people who finishing them realistic dream.Thus,I hold the opinion that some people should focus to achieve the realistic goal.

求英语语法 帝 帮忙check 下 Thanks for your giving!From my point of view,some people hold the opinion that people should follow the dream.However other people hold the negative attitude.As far as I am concerned ,I agree with some people shoul
一、I agree with some people should focus to achieve the realistic goal.with的后面不该跟个句子吧
二、is best way to ,少了个the
三、cultivate them,应该是their
四、 such as a Steve jobs ,多了a
五、his successful is not easily,成功应该用名词,而且后面不该接副词.
六、Because Steve who was born a poor family, and he also was an orphan when he was child. 改为Steve was born in a poor family, and he was also an orphan when he was a child.
七、 However he never gave up his dream that becoming a great CEO.that改为of,因为that后面要跟句子.
后面的暂且不看了,太长了.给分啊.写得挺好的,就是语法还不太过关