渴望英语高手修改作文Yesterday,I went to my grandparents’home,and study chemistry.Today,I arrived in my grandparents’home at ten o’clock.I greet mygrandfarther.After than,I drank a bottle of milk.Then,I start study chemistry.At 12 o’

渴望英语高手修改作文Yesterday,I went to my grandparents’home,and study chemistry.Today,I arrived in my grandparents’home at ten o’clock.I greet mygrandfarther.After than,I drank a bottle of milk.Then,I start study chemistry.At 12 o’
渴望英语高手修改作文
Yesterday,I went to my grandparents’home,and study chemistry.
Today,I arrived in my grandparents’home at ten o’clock.I greet mygrandfarther.After than,I drank a bottle of milk.Then,I start study chemistry.
At 12 o’clock.felt hungry.I ate a bowl of rice、some chicken and vegetable.Then I had a nap.
In the afternoon.I went back to home.

渴望英语高手修改作文Yesterday,I went to my grandparents’home,and study chemistry.Today,I arrived in my grandparents’home at ten o’clock.I greet mygrandfarther.After than,I drank a bottle of milk.Then,I start study chemistry.At 12 o’
My Weeken
Yesterday is my first holiday in the weeken.I was missing my grandparents very much,so i went to their home on the mornming.my grandparents were very gald to see me ,and i played with the children in their home.I had a wonderful time in that morning.But the afternoon ,i studyed chemistry as usuall.
Today,my grandfarther cooked by himself for lunch.It was a great delisious meal.I ate a bowl of rice,some chicken and vegetable,i liked my grandfarther's cook!Time flied ,it was time to say good bye to my my grandparents,I went back home with my parents in the afternoon.
I like my weeken with my grandparents,i am looking forward to seeing them next weeken.

Yesterday,I went to my grandparents’home and study chemistry.
Today,I arrived at my grandparents’home at ten o’clock.I greet mygrandfarther.Then,I drank a bottle of milk.Next,I started study chemi...

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Yesterday,I went to my grandparents’home and study chemistry.
Today,I arrived at my grandparents’home at ten o’clock.I greet mygrandfarther.Then,I drank a bottle of milk.Next,I started study chemistry.At 12 o’clock.I felt hungry.I ate a bowl of rice、some chicken and vegetable.Finally I have a nap.
改的一般，觉得句型太单一了，多使用短语和多种时态。
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本人海外……
Yesterday,I went to my grandparents’home,and studied chemistry.
Today,I arrived at my grandparents’home at ten o’clock.I greet grandfarther.After then,I drank a glass of milk.Then,I sta...

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本人海外……
Yesterday,I went to my grandparents’home,and studied chemistry.
Today,I arrived at my grandparents’home at ten o’clock.I greet grandfarther.After then,I drank a glass of milk.Then,I started study chemistry.
At 12 o’clock.I felt hungry. So I ate some chicken,vegetable and a bowl of rice .Then I had a nap until afternoon.I went back to my home.
记得要用过去式啊……

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中文意思：昨天，我去了我的grandparents'home，研究化学。今天，我来到了我的grandparents'home十点。我迎接mygrandfarther。以后，我喝了一瓶牛奶。然后，我开始学习化学。12点clock.felt饿了。我吃了一碗饭、一些鸡肉和蔬菜。然后我有小睡一会儿。在下午，我回到了家里。
（知道意思后自己可以修改吧）...

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中文意思：昨天，我去了我的grandparents'home，研究化学。今天，我来到了我的grandparents'home十点。我迎接mygrandfarther。以后，我喝了一瓶牛奶。然后，我开始学习化学。12点clock.felt饿了。我吃了一碗饭、一些鸡肉和蔬菜。然后我有小睡一会儿。在下午，我回到了家里。
（知道意思后自己可以修改吧）

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Yesterday ,I went to my grandparents' home and studied chemistry.
Today, I arrive at my grandparents' home at ten o'clock. I greet my grandfather. after that, I drink a bottle of milk.Then ,I star...

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Yesterday ,I went to my grandparents' home and studied chemistry.
Today, I arrive at my grandparents' home at ten o'clock. I greet my grandfather. after that, I drink a bottle of milk.Then ,I start studying chemistry.
At 12 o'clock , I felt hungry , Iate a bowl of rice , some chicken and vegetables .Then I took a nap.
In the afternoon , I go back to home.
我个人认为此文最大的问题不是在於遣词用字,而是缺乏连贯性( coherent) .如果你在作文上有一定的造诣,你就会发现作文有三点十分重要: Clear , Coherent and Correct ,简称3C.当然这篇作文有更好的vocab可以替代，令文章生色不少

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