大家帮我看看,我这段英语有没有什么大的毛病,After graduation,the first year I did office secretarial work in medincine industry,the second year was promoted to administrative assistant.My contents of the work:1.My responsibility was

大家帮我看看,我这段英语有没有什么大的毛病,After graduation,the first year I did office secretarial work in medincine industry,the second year was promoted to administrative assistant.My contents of the work:1.My responsibility was
大家帮我看看,我这段英语有没有什么大的毛病,
After graduation,the first year I did office secretarial work in medincine industry,the second year was promoted to administrative assistant.
My contents of the work:
1.My responsibility was to manage the company's main important files and documents .
2.I was in charge of the reception of the visiting guest
3.I wrote a number of announcements and the company rules.
4.I assisted the Chief Executive Officer for the company's daily arrangements
5.I managed the company's daily office supplies.
My skills:I am good at Word 、Excel and Powerpoint office software operations.I can use simply Photoshop's operation,and scan documents and photos.During the working time,I received a good reputation from leadership and colleagues because of my patience、hardworking and responsibility.I am also very easy going with others ,I often exchange new ideas with my leadership,and the company leadership affirmed me.

大家帮我看看,我这段英语有没有什么大的毛病,After graduation,the first year I did office secretarial work in medincine industry,the second year was promoted to administrative assistant.My contents of the work:1.My responsibility was
我看了一下,没有太大的问题,只是许多表达不太地道.
1,第一段的the first year 和the second year 做时间状语时应该加in或者for.而且,为了不和状语after graduation 重叠,应放置在句末：
After graduation,I did office secretarial work in the medicine industry （或者直接说in a hospital）during the first year,and was promoted to administrative assistant in the second year.
2,第二部分工作内容因为已经默认主语是自己,所以不用翻译那么详尽,当作写条约一样就ok!
Following are my work contents:
1)Manage the company's main important files and documents.
2)In charge of the reception of the visiting guest.
3)Writing announcements and rules for the company.
4)Assisting the Chief Executive Officer for the company's daily affairs.
5)Managing daily office supplies.
3,技能描述中simply应为simple,
要表达有责任心,不是responsibility,而是sense of responsibility.
和上级交流心得应该是exchange new ideas with my superior.
上司肯定了我应该是 superior(或者leader)appreciate me.上级领导很欣赏我.