英语2分钟的自我介绍,帮看看有没有语法错误帮看看还有什么语法错误,还缺点什么.要有2分钟的内容,不够的话请帮忙根据文章内容添一点.Good morning,my name is ***** .It is really a great honor to have thi

英语2分钟的自我介绍,帮看看有没有语法错误帮看看还有什么语法错误,还缺点什么.要有2分钟的内容,不够的话请帮忙根据文章内容添一点.Good morning,my name is ***** .It is really a great honor to have thi
英语2分钟的自我介绍,帮看看有没有语法错误
帮看看还有什么语法错误,还缺点什么.要有2分钟的内容,不够的话请帮忙根据文章内容添一点.
Good morning,my name is ***** .It is really a great honor to have this chance to introduce myself.
I come from the city of kunming the capital of Yunnan province .
I am open-minded,quick in thought and very fond of movies.In my spare time ,I have board interests like many others younger.I like watching movies ,especially those about cult,zombie and so on.Frequently,I exchange with other people by making comments in the forum on line.In addition ,I am a PC game fan for years ,Silent Hill is my favorite .I am able to operate the computer well.I am skillful in searching for information in Internet.Of course ,i also like music,sport and so on.
Though my English is poor,I still like it.Everything comes to him who waits and I believe if I Stick to it,I'm sure I can learn English well.This is my self introduction.

英语2分钟的自我介绍,帮看看有没有语法错误帮看看还有什么语法错误,还缺点什么.要有2分钟的内容,不够的话请帮忙根据文章内容添一点.Good morning,my name is ***** .It is really a great honor to have thi
在下一并帮你梳理整洁保证让您满意!
Good morning,everyone,
My name is XX.I'm from Kunming City,the capital of Yunnan Province.
It's my great honor to have this chance to introduce myself to you.I'm open-minded with quick thoughts and very fond of movies.I enjoy watching movies very much,especially those related to Cult,Zombie and so on.In my spare time,I've broad interests like many other younger people do,and I frequently exchange with them by comments on the forum online,In addition,I've been PC game-fan for years,and Silent Hill comes my favorite one.Of course,I also like music,sport etc.I'm able to operate computer well skillful in searching for information over the Internet.
Although my English is poor,I still enjoy learning it.As an old saying goes 'everything is possible',I'm sure I can learn English well once I stick to it.
That's all for my brief introduction.
Thanks for your listening!
文章整体上写得很不错,语序稍作调整就完美了,英文中要注意避免一个词重复使用,还有台词的演讲的套路用法不能忽视,作为演讲稿简单清楚,语意连贯有声有色显得很重要,原文内容基本不变,其中有个时态我已经帮您调整好了,for years 必须用完成时态,表示一段时间.下面：
everything comes to him who waits 意思不明确也不得体,建议改成这样简单明朗：As an old saying goes 'everything is possible',我想您应该表达的是这个意思,这样文学性就很强了.
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Silent Hill is my favorite 去宾语应该加game

others younger改为other youngers watching movies改为see movies exchange with 改为communicate with searching for information 去掉for in改为on 倒数第二句有点别扭。暂时就找这么多

我直接在上面改了哈
Good morning,my name is ***** . It is really a great honor to have this chance to introduce myself.
I come from the city of kunming，the capital of Yunnan province .
I am open-min...

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我直接在上面改了哈
Good morning,my name is ***** . It is really a great honor to have this chance to introduce myself.
I come from the city of kunming，the capital of Yunnan province .
I am open-minded,quick in thought and very fond of movies. In my spare time ,I have a wide spectrum of interests like many other peers. I like watching movies , especially those about cult,zombie and so on. I exchange ideas with other people a lot ,by making comments in the forum on line . In addition , I have been a PC game fan for years ,Silent Hill is my favorite . I excel at computer. I am skillful in searching for information. and i also like music,sport and so on.
Though my English is poor,I still like it. good comes to those who wait and I believe as long as I Stick to it, I can learn English well. this is me,and u can get more before long.

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1省会前加逗号,非限定性定语从句,口语表达时看不出.
2younger改teenager没younger
3不是exchange是conmmunicate你是说和别人交流吧?或者ex~ sth by
4on the internet

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