求看托福作文值几分Increase teacher’s salary for promotingeducation quality?As the society increasingly improves,economics become the key bones of the development of a country.Salaryinevitably becomes a judgment to a person’s work.The mor

求看托福作文值几分Increase teacher’s salary for promotingeducation quality?As the society increasingly improves,economics become the key bones of the development of a country.Salaryinevitably becomes a judgment to a person’s work.The mor
求看托福作文值几分
Increase teacher’s salary for promotingeducation quality?
As the society increasingly improves,economics become the key bones of the development of a country.Salaryinevitably becomes a judgment to a person’s work.The more salary they earn,the higher level they are.This also happens in the school yard.However,it isa controversy that if higher salary brings better qualified education.I perceivethat not higher but appropriate salary is the promise of the qualifiededucation.
For the slender salary of good teachers,ofcourse,a rise will exert the advancement of the education quality.Highersalary is a supportive way to let skilled teachers’ focus totally on how toimprove their teaching skills.Reversely,they will find another way to raisetheir family,even illegally strive for that.For example,my aunt is a goodEnglish teacher who teaches in an easily understandable method,however,has apoor salary for 20 years.She always thought that she deserves better salarythat the school refuses to give.Since her family with five members are allliving on her slender salary,she run an illegal English cram school secretly.Finallyit is found by the school,and then she got fired.Illegal as this behavior is,it is a bad consequence of insufficient salary.How can a good teacherconcentrate on higher quality of education without a desirable salary?
However,for the teachers who already havea suitable salary equaling with their job,an increase is unnecessary.On thecontrary,a rise on their salary would offer them a cozy and comfortable conditionto own a decent job to showoff and salary to raise their family.For instance,my high school algebra teacher was already a professor with a top salary on myhigh school.However,he thought he has surpassed all the colleagues and hasn’tpublished thesis papers for 3 years.Undoubtedly,there won’t be anyimprovement in his thesis level during this time.It is also a backwards forhis individual.
In conclusion,an increased salary for apoor but good teacher will brings more qualified education,on the contrary,for a teacher who already has a content salary will not exert advantages oneducation.As old saying said:Suit is best.

求看托福作文值几分Increase teacher’s salary for promotingeducation quality?As the society increasingly improves,economics become the key bones of the development of a country.Salaryinevitably becomes a judgment to a person’s work.The mor
对不起,恕我直言,如果严格评估这篇文章20点几乎

在一般情况下,这篇文章的结构是相当完整.
但觉得论据说服力不强,其原因是相当模糊的,
句话是不够具体,逻辑问题
另一个房东语法错误是有点太.
一些错误直接影响的语义影响读者理解,这是很致命的,ETS的这些要求是比较高的

希望楼主打字测试不应该太贪婪,请尽量减少一些更初级的语法错误.

[个人来说,我不能同意的声明.]
业主同意吗?如果我不能同意.最初使用这种结构后很不错,但没有更多的语义完全相反.

[这是一个很基本的要求,人们应该有激情的国王,他或她的民族和祖国的荣誉关注.]
激情
王（?）说：此前,人们应该...以后怎么成为他或她?

之前和之后就是这样保持一致. ,最好的改变,这是...

每个人都应该执行某种全国服务向自己的国家,以显示他或她的保真度.
类似的错误,每个人都应该...应遵循向他或她的国家
某种改变如果一个天一个平民在一个国家不爱他的祖国,他可能没有更多的一些种被称为“人”,这是对那些知道如何感谢,感谢他Growed土地的唯一用途.]
这个问题：一个平民应采用不
他再也... growed. “整个句子有问题.
太偏颇,不够客观的语义,请楼主重新
无论语义,语法单,是可以改变的,他不能被称为作为一个人,只应也用来形容一个人谁知道该怎么感谢的土地上,他已经长大了.
提醒成长过去增长

永远不能原谅应该永远不能原谅

采取军事服务,例如,可以促进国家安全系统,因为大的系统是建立在无数个人sodier应]
其实,这成为一个例如,然后制定一个很好的例子,但不幸的特定语义不明确的足够
楼主的短语应该成为一个不知道是什么意思?
无数个人sodier ---无数单兵

[我有向全国和我的生活变得更完整]
应该改变,我向全国作出了贡献,我的生命变得更加完整.
另外,参数“做全国服务收益很多好处,但几乎没有缺点.”这句话不打紧,不直接支持的论点.楼主应该添加另一种说法

GAT在一起---扎堆

这使我们的国家更加强大,使梦想成为一个超级大的国家“来现实的一部分.],
指不清楚. “这”指的是什么?请写出来
另外,请问楼主,“是一个超级大的国家”是谁的梦的一部分?我们的国家,还是人民?
另外,如果房东所要表达的意思是最好的超级强国的“超级大国”,“大国”,是通常只用来形容面积?国家

[国家服务得到了这么多的特权,那么我们为什么不从现在做起,奉献自己国家服务.
结束时,这是不是很好.首先,作者没有进行前面所讨论的一个简要的参数; ...特权是一个完整的句子,你为什么不...服务?两者之间应该连词连接一个完整的问题,上任以来.为什么.?,得到了---有特权---到---特权

楼主的写作,甚至可能是更严格的...
希望,我可以给你一个提醒你一些帮助
保持良好的