请大神帮忙评价一下我这首英文诗歌.i get up early in the morning lost something that seensopening the windows to feel living velvety sunlight cover the earth with the wind enchanting,warming,and lovingyou are the light that eternalizing
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请大神帮忙评价一下我这首英文诗歌.i get up early in the morning lost something that seensopening the windows to feel living velvety sunlight cover the earth with the wind enchanting,warming,and lovingyou are the light that eternalizing
请大神帮忙评价一下我这首英文诗歌.
i get up early in the morning
lost something that seens
opening the windows to feel living
velvety sunlight cover the earth with the wind
enchanting,warming,and loving
you are the light that eternalizing
evening i go outside
looking at the charming sky
feeling wonderful sunlight
keeping your face in my mind
touching golden sun with smile
listening to bird song quiet
请大神帮忙评价一下我这首英文诗歌.i get up early in the morning lost something that seensopening the windows to feel living velvety sunlight cover the earth with the wind enchanting,warming,and lovingyou are the light that eternalizing
I awakened this morning,
lost something precious.
Opened the window to feel life,
velvet sunshine casting over earth,
with enchanting,warming,and beloving wind.
you,are that eternal light.
i went out side at twilight,
looked at the charming sky.
feeled the wonderful sunray,
reminding your face in my mind.
touching,the sun with golden smile,
listening to the bird's quiet song.
早晨我起床很早
失去的东西一样
打开窗户感受生活
随着风柔和的阳光笼罩大地
迷人的，气候变暖，和爱
你是光，正在使永恒，使不灭
晚上我到外面去
看着迷人的天空
感觉美好的阳光
保持你的脸在我的脑海
用微笑感动金色的太阳
听鸟歌安静我不是叫你翻译出来啊...-_-哦，这首诗歌挺好的，没有什么问题。...
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早晨我起床很早
失去的东西一样
打开窗户感受生活
随着风柔和的阳光笼罩大地
迷人的，气候变暖，和爱
你是光，正在使永恒，使不灭
晚上我到外面去
看着迷人的天空
感觉美好的阳光
保持你的脸在我的脑海
用微笑感动金色的太阳
听鸟歌安静
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楼主你好
第一段第三句那个living没太明白，具体想表达什么含义呢？feel the life?
第二段第三句个人觉得将sunlight改为sunset既能避免重复又能更准确表达晚霞的意思。
另外第二段的ing感觉使用过多，可适当修改。
希望可以帮到您。第二段的那个是押韵的需要。那个living是感受生命的意思，也就是feel the li...
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楼主你好
第一段第三句那个living没太明白，具体想表达什么含义呢？feel the life?
第二段第三句个人觉得将sunlight改为sunset既能避免重复又能更准确表达晚霞的意思。
另外第二段的ing感觉使用过多，可适当修改。
希望可以帮到您。
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