Sports on the campusThere are many sports on the campus,such as basketball soccer table tennis running tai chi and soon on .we all know do sports can keep us health.But I think sports also make us understanding something and happy.Recently table tenn

Sports on the campusThere are many sports on the campus,such as basketball soccer table tennis running tai chi and soon on .we all know do sports can keep us health.But I think sports also make us understanding something and happy.Recently table tenn
Sports on the campus
There are many sports on the campus,such as basketball soccer table tennis running tai chi and soon on .we all know do sports can keep us health.But I think sports also make us understanding something and happy.
Recently table tennis become my affection sport.Everday I would play table tennis on my spare time.Though my skillful is not good ,I like it .from playing table tennis I know everthing is not easy to do ,you must have patience .table tennis let me having more laughter.When I play table tennis with my partners and teachers ,I feel it is a enjoy time.They conduct me and we compete each other .when study made me tired ,I will go to play table tennis.It makes me energetic .
So we should take part in sports on the campus.You can choice one sport that your favourite.I believe it will bring much happy and health.

Sports on the campusThere are many sports on the campus,such as basketball soccer table tennis running tai chi and soon on .we all know do sports can keep us health.But I think sports also make us understanding something and happy.Recently table tenn
There are many sports on the campus, such as basketball （,）soccer （,）table tennis（,） running （,）tai chi （,）and soon on. (so on 不是 soon on)we all know (As well known, ) do (doing) sports can keep us health (healthy). But I think sports also make （help）us understanding something (? some philosophy) and happy (being happy).
Recently(,) table tennis become （is/has become） my affection sport (favorate sport). Everday I would play (play 没有would) table tennis on (during) my spare time. Though my skillful (my skill) is not good ,I like it . from (From)playing table tennis (,) I know (recognized/understanded) everthing is not (nothing is ) easy to do , (and) you must have patience (you have to keep practising to be good/to do well). table tennis let me having more laughter. (Table tennis makes me happy and laugh more) When I play table tennis with my partners and teachers , I feel it is a enjoy (joyful) time. They conduct me and we compete (against) each other . when study made me tired (When I am tired of studying),I will go to play table tennis (to refresh myself).It makes me energetic .
So we should take part in sports on the (the 有点多余)campus. You can choice （choose）one sport that (to be) your favourite. I believe it will bring much happy (joy) and health.(或者是 I believe it will make you (us) happy and healthy.
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Sports On the Campus
The campus houses many sports, such as basketball, soccer, table tennis, running, tai chi and etc. We all know do sports can keep us healthy. But I think sports al...

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Sports On the Campus
The campus houses many sports, such as basketball, soccer, table tennis, running, tai chi and etc. We all know do sports can keep us healthy. But I think sports also help us learn more and simply be happy.
Recently table tennis has become my favorite sport. Ever day I would play table tennis whenever I'm free. Though my skills still needs improvements, I enjoy it. From playing table tennis I understand that nothing is easy to do; I must have patience. Table tennis gives me more laughters. When I play table tennis with my partners and teachers, I feel joyful. They teach me the secrets of playing and constantly challenge me. When I'm tired from hours of study, I will go to play table tennis. It makes me energetic again.
So we should participate in sports on the campus. You can pick whichever you like best. I believe it will bring happiness and health as well.

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