麻烦请英文语法高手改下论文中的一段语法问题!From the prospective of technologies to analyze:We can clearly see the development change of a specific technology.For example,Panasonic owns many basic patents,Core patents in hydrogen

麻烦请英文语法高手改下论文中的一段语法问题!From the prospective of technologies to analyze:We can clearly see the development change of a specific technology.For example,Panasonic owns many basic patents,Core patents in hydrogen
麻烦请英文语法高手改下论文中的一段语法问题!
From the prospective of technologies to analyze:We can clearly see the development change of a specific technology.For example,Panasonic owns many basic patents,Core patents in hydrogen storage alloys.From 1990-1995,mainly used refractory metals and to reduce metal to store hydrogen,and in 1996 on this basis developed a new refractory alloy.In 1999,is trying to store hydrogen by heat treatment technology and change Nonferrous metals,and in 2000.Through the metal powder processing to achieve hydrogen storage.Electrode technology aspect as well,from the initial nickel,cobalt,iron to carbon-based electrodes,Panasonic try to use various materials for electrode technologies.After 10 years of hydrogen storage alloy and electrode technology studying,Panasonic have chosen to develop hydrogen production technology.In 1998 they have been to extract hydrogen from metal hydride,and after 2001 extracting hydrogen technology has been switch to hydrogen mixture.
从具体技术角度分析
通过走向图我们可以清楚的看到一项具体技术的发展变化,比如在松下公司拥有多项基础专利、核心专利的储氢合金技术方面,1990-1995年主要采用的是利用难熔金属与还原金属来储存氢,而1996年在此基础上发展了新的难熔合金,1999年则尝试通过热处理技术和改变有色金来储存氢,2000年则是通过对金属粉末加工来达到储氢的目的.电极技术方面也是如此,从最初的镍、钴、铁到之后的碳基电极,松下公司尝试着使用多种材料用于电极技术的开发.在经过长达10年的储氢合金与电极技术研究之后,松下选择了向制氢技术领域发展,并且曾在1998年采用金属氢化物来提取氢,而在2001年之后,提取氢的技术已转向使用氢混合物.

麻烦请英文语法高手改下论文中的一段语法问题!From the prospective of technologies to analyze:We can clearly see the development change of a specific technology.For example,Panasonic owns many basic patents,Core patents in hydrogen
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1、如果LZ要是论文的话,第一句里的:要改成,的.然后We的W变小写.
2、We can一句没有说明“通过走向图”,外语中发展了就是变化了,所以可以改成We can clearly see the development of a specific technology by trend diagrams.
3、For example一句,Core是名词,没有形容词的意思,用法不对.对于同一名词的形容要把所有形容词放到一起,所以改成For example,Panasonic owns many basic,central patents in hydrogen storage alloys.
4、From 1990-1995一句,很多不规范处,如破折号的运用.而且该句缺少主语.而且状语的语序也比较奇怪.所以改为From 1990 to 1995,it was mainly using refractory and reducing metals to store hydrogen,and,on this basis,developed new refractory alloys in 1996.
5、In 1999一句,主语时态不对,应该用过去式.连接词and前后动词应该并列.改为：In 1999,Panasonic was trying to store hydrogen by heat treatment technology and by changing nonferrous metals,but throughout 2000,though,the company was intending to achieve hydrogen storage by processing the metal powder.
6、Electrode一句,还是动词和主语的问题.还有如果做对比的话句子前后属性也应相同,比如后边的carbon-based是形容词,前边的nickel等也要改为形容词.但iron本身有形容词意思,所以不改.ironic是讽刺的意思,不要搞混.所以改为：The aspect of electrode technology was under reseach as well.From the initially nickelic,cobaltic,iron electrodes to carbon-based ones,Panasonic,since then,had tried use various materials for development of electrode technology.
7、After一句,有一些习惯用法不太合适.可改为：After a 10-year developed study of hydrogen storage alloy and electrode technology then,Panasonic had turned to hydrogen production technology.
8、最后一句,代词they指代不明,大忌,改为Panasonic或it代.原句改为：In 1998,it began to extract hydrogen from metallic hydrides.However,after 2001,the technology of extracting hydrogen has been switched to the one of using hydrogen mixture.
综上,LZ的主要问题在主语和动词.还有如果LZ写的是非常高端的论文的话建议容易些比较高级的词汇还有词语.比如“基础的”可以把“basic”改为“fundamental”等,此处不做赘述.还有一些介词的用法如“In 哪年”改为“At the time of 哪年”等等,要灵活运用,不要总用一个相同的词汇.
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从具体技术角度分析
Analysis from the angle of specific technology
通过走向图我们可以清楚的看到一项具体技术的发展变化，比如在松下公司拥有多项基础专利、核心专利的储氢合金技术方面，1990-1995年主要采用的是利用难...

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说明：需改动的地方比较多，一一描述实在太费功夫，麻烦楼主对照一下即可。已在原翻译基础上做了修改，可以放心采用。
从具体技术角度分析
Analysis from the angle of specific technology
通过走向图我们可以清楚的看到一项具体技术的发展变化，比如在松下公司拥有多项基础专利、核心专利的储氢合金技术方面，1990-1995年主要采用的是利用难熔金属与还原金属来储存氢，而1996年在此基础上发展了新的难熔合金，1999年则尝试通过热处理技术和改变有色金来储存氢，2000年则是通过对金属粉末加工来达到储氢的目的。From the trend chart we can clearly see the development change of a specific technology. For example, the hydrogen storage technology which Panasonic owns many basic patents and core patents, from 1990 to 1995, it mainly used refractory metals and reducing metal to store hydrogen, and in 1996 Panasonic developed a new refractory alloy on this basis,. In 1999, Panasonic tried to store hydrogen by heat treatment technology and changing nonferrous metals, and in 2000 it tried to achieve the goal of storing hydrogen by processing metal powder.电极技术方面也是如此，从最初的镍、钴、铁到之后的碳基电极，松下公司尝试着使用多种材料用于电极技术的开发。It is also the case for electrode technology, from initial nickel, cobalt, iron electrodes to subsequent carbon-based electrodes, Panasonic tried to use various materials for the development of electrode technologies.在经过长达10年的储氢合金与电极技术研究之后，松下选择了向制氢技术领域发展，并且曾在1998年采用金属氢化物来提取氢，而在2001年之后，提取氢的技术已转向使用氢混合物。After 10 years of research on hydrogen storage alloy and electrode technologies, Panasonic chose to develop hydrogen production technology, and tried to extract hydrogen from metal hydride, and after 2001 the hydrogen extracting technology has been switched to use hydrogen mixture.

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