求英语达人 帮看看有没有语法错误 Once upon a time,a clever boy called Sima Guang.One day,he played hide and seek with his friends in the yard.There is a big water tank in the yard,a boy climb up the tree,above the tank.Suddenly,The boy

求英语达人 帮看看有没有语法错误 Once upon a time,a clever boy called Sima Guang.One day,he played hide and seek with his friends in the yard.There is a big water tank in the yard,a boy climb up the tree,above the tank.Suddenly,The boy
求英语达人 帮看看有没有语法错误
Once upon a time,a clever boy called Sima Guang.
One day,he played hide and seek with his friends in the yard.
There is a big water tank in the yard,a boy climb up the tree,above the tank.
Suddenly,The boy fell into the tank .
Sima Guang picked up a big rock,broke the water tank.
The water went out,the boy was saved!

求英语达人 帮看看有没有语法错误 Once upon a time,a clever boy called Sima Guang.One day,he played hide and seek with his friends in the yard.There is a big water tank in the yard,a boy climb up the tree,above the tank.Suddenly,The boy
既然是过去式,那通篇就都得用过去式
所以第三句There is 改成 There was.,a boy climbed.
倒数第二句picked up a big rock 逗号之后不能直接跟一个broke,因为逗号之后句子就没主语了,可以把逗号改成picked up a big rock then broke.
最后一句虽然没语法错误,不过went out 改成 flew out好一点并且逗号去掉

第一行。 was called
第二行。 无错
第三行。 There was... and a boy climbed...
第四行。无错
第五行。 rock and...
第六行。 out and the boy...能帮改下吗？Once upon a time, there was a clever boy called Sima Guang. ...

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第一行。 was called
第二行。 无错
第三行。 There was... and a boy climbed...
第四行。无错
第五行。 rock and...
第六行。 out and the boy...

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Once upon a time, there was a clever boy called Sima Guang.
One day, he played hide and seek with his friends in the yard.
There was a big water tank in the yard, a boy climbed up the tree ab...

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Once upon a time, there was a clever boy called Sima Guang.
One day, he played hide and seek with his friends in the yard.
There was a big water tank in the yard, a boy climbed up the tree above the tank.
Suddenly, the boy fell into the tank .
Sima Guang picked up a big rock, and broke the water tank.
The water went out, and the boy was saved!

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1. there was a clever boy called Sima Guang.
因为【clever boy called Sima Guang】中called called Sima Guang作后置定语修饰boy，没有主谓，所以改成 there is a clever boy called Sima Guang 比较好
2.there was a big water t...

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1. there was a clever boy called Sima Guang.
因为【clever boy called Sima Guang】中called called Sima Guang作后置定语修饰boy，没有主谓，所以改成 there is a clever boy called Sima Guang 比较好
2.there was a big water tank in the yard. A boy climbed up the tree above it.
这句话分开来写比较好。
3.Sima Guang picked up a big rock, and broke the water tank.
4. The water went out, and the boy was saved!
童鞋要注意连词的用法。

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第二行，he was playing hide and seek with..
第三行，there was.. climbed
其它的正确。

第一句，句子成分不完整。Once upon a time, there was a clever boy called Sima Guang.
第二句单独看来没有语法错误，但如果存在上下文，要表达的是过去进行时的话，就应是was playing；
第三句tree后面的都好去, climbed up。另外，请问你这是一个完整的段落吗？我的意思是你这些句子是要连起来讲司马光砸缸的故事吗...

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第一句，句子成分不完整。Once upon a time, there was a clever boy called Sima Guang.
第二句单独看来没有语法错误，但如果存在上下文，要表达的是过去进行时的话，就应是was playing；
第三句tree后面的都好去, climbed up。另外，请问你这是一个完整的段落吗？我的意思是你这些句子是要连起来讲司马光砸缸的故事吗？如果是的话，我看完每一句之后会给你参考例文。
第四句没有语法错误
第五句rock后面的逗号改为and
最后一句没有语法错误。
例文
Once upon a time, there was a clever boy named Sima Guang. One day, when he was playing with his friends in the yard, one of the boys climbed up the tree, below which was a big water tank. Suddenly, the boy fell into the tank (and cried for help)! Sima Guang quickly picked up a big rock and hit the water tank. Eventually/Finally/In the end, the tank was broken and the water went out, the boy was saved!

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