英文求职信,麻烦帮我挑文法错并修改!谢谢Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for the position of xxx. I saw the post for this position on the xxx website.I am a fresh graduate of the XX University, majoring in Business Administration

英文求职信,麻烦帮我挑文法错并修改!谢谢Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for the position of xxx. I saw the post for this position on the xxx website.I am a fresh graduate of the XX University, majoring in Business Administration
英文求职信,麻烦帮我挑文法错并修改!谢谢
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to apply for the position of xxx. I saw the post for this position on the xxx website.
I am a fresh graduate of the XX University, majoring in Business Administration.During my education, I have grasped the principals of my major and skills of practice andI was actively involved school activities and Class Committee,such as swimming team and Public relationship of Class Committee.I also had taken a part-time job in the coffeeshop and Univeristy.From my working and school activities experiences, I learned the spirit of team work and communication skills. It made me realize that I enjoy communicating with people and facing the challenge. I am a positive and responsibility person, also have strong resistance of pressureand .I am well versed in word processing,spreadsheets, powerpoint, and email application.
I would appreciate your time in reviewing my enclosed resume and if there is any additional information you require, please contact me. I would welcome an opportunity to meet with you for a personal interview.

英文求职信,麻烦帮我挑文法错并修改!谢谢Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for the position of xxx. I saw the post for this position on the xxx website.I am a fresh graduate of the XX University, majoring in Business Administration

搞定啦.=）希望对你有帮助!

I am writing to apply for the position of xxx. I saw the post for this position on the xxx website.
I am a fresh graduated from XX University, majoring in Business Administration.During my Univers...

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I am writing to apply for the position of xxx. I saw the post for this position on the xxx website.
I am a fresh graduated from XX University, majoring in Business Administration.During my University, I have grasped the principals of my major and skills of practice.meanwhile,I was actively involved school activities and Class Committee,such as swimming team and public relationship of Class Committee.I also had taken a part-time job in the coffeeshop and Univeristy.By my working and school activities experiences, I learned the spirit of team work and communication skills which made me realize that I enjoy communicating with people and facing the challenge. I am a positive and responsibility person, also have strong resistance of pressure.I am well versed in word processing,spreadsheets, powerpoint, and email application.
I would appreciate your time in reviewing my enclosed resume.Any additional information being required, please contact me. I would welcome an opportunity to meet with you for a personal interview.

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I am a positive and responsibility person,responsibility→responsible,额，还是怪怪的╮(╯_╰)╭

1.It made me realize that I enjoy communicating with people and facing the challenge. 前面的It made me realize that 似乎没有必要，去掉就行了。I enjoyed communicating with people and facing the challenge.
2.also h...

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1.It made me realize that I enjoy communicating with people and facing the challenge. 前面的It made me realize that 似乎没有必要，去掉就行了。I enjoyed communicating with people and facing the challenge.
2.also have strong resistance of pressure“and”。
3.I am well versed in word processing,spreadsheets, powerpoint, and email application.简略为I‘m good at office software of word, excel, ppt, as well as email application.
4.I would appreciate your time in 把time in 去掉不是很好吗？I'd appreciate your reviewing ...
5.I would welcome 改为 I’d like to have an opportunity ...
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自荐信宜简忌繁，让人一目了然比使用生僻词汇和表达方式效果更好。总的来说，写的不错，在中等以上水平。看你的开头Dear Sir/Madam 就知道不是初学者。

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