英语作文纠错.换号,提问.低水准作文,勿嘲笑.Today many students like listening to the music while do the homework .I think this is a bad habit.First ,listen to the music while do the homework will disperse us attention ,can`t make our

英语作文纠错.换号,提问.低水准作文,勿嘲笑.Today many students like listening to the music while do the homework .I think this is a bad habit.First ,listen to the music while do the homework will disperse us attention ,can`t make our
英语作文纠错.
换号,提问.
低水准作文,勿嘲笑.
Today many students like listening to the music while do the homework .I think this is a bad habit.
First ,listen to the music while do the homework will disperse us attention ,can`t make our brain focus on one thing .So this habit will reduce our work efficiency may lead to the mistakes .Second,use earphone listen to concert to cause hearing for a long time ,have loud injury to we student .The last,choose some melody in a quick rhythm it will make student feel nervous but choose one song in a slow rhythm will make student asleep in summer and winter .
In a word ,I think listen to the music while do the homework is a bad habit ,ti will bring more harm than good.
单词拼错忽视.
我觉得语法很多问题.

英语作文纠错.换号,提问.低水准作文,勿嘲笑.Today many students like listening to the music while do the homework .I think this is a bad habit.First ,listen to the music while do the homework will disperse us attention ,can`t make our
有些句子我都不知道怎么改啊,很chinese english的感觉～说点语法小错误吧～
disperse us attention--our attention
So this habit will reduce our work efficiency may lead to the mistakes .
是什么样的文章?雅思的话最好不要用so,用therefore之类的比较正式.may 前面要加and或that,不然没有主语或是个错误的复句.
use earphone listen to concert to cause hearing for a long time ,have loud injury to we student .
这句好难改啊～我是中国人都有点不太明白.we student -严重的错误.也许你可以写成：if students spend too much on listening the conert by earphone,it may effect the sense of hearing of students.
choose some melody in a quick rhythm it will make student feel nervous but choose one song in a slow rhythm will make student asleep in summer and winter .
我觉得choose是多余的,你硬要写的话应该要写成choosing,其实直接写quick rhythm melody就可以吧～make student fall asleep 更好吧～
其他的就是注意句式的多样性,你一直在重复listening to the music while doing homework,3次.
就说这么多!

Today many students like listening to the music while do the homework . I think this is a bad habit.
listen to music 不加the，while doing homework
First , listen to the music while do the homew...

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Today many students like listening to the music while do the homework . I think this is a bad habit.
listen to music 不加the，while doing homework
First , listen to the music while do the homework will disperse us attention , can`t make our brain focus on one thing us改成our ,which can't make our mind focus
So this habit will reduce our work efficiency may lead to the mistakes our working efficiency and may lead to mistakes
Second,use earphone listen to concert to cause hearing for a long time , have loud injury to we student .
using earphones to enjoy music for a long time may cause hearing impairment.
The last,choose some melody in a quick rhythm it will make student feel nervous but choose one song in a slow rhythm will make student asleep in summer and winter .
choosing some melodies in quick rhythm will make students feel nervous but choosing.......will make students fall asleep
I think listen to the music while do the homework is a bad habit , ti will bring more harm than good.
i think listening to music while doing homework is a bad habit .最后一句不是清楚该怎么改，感觉文章确实有点chinglish。语法有点乱。其中有些地方我也不知道怎么改。···汗一个

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你是写了中文然后用机器翻译的吧