我写了篇英语作文,谁帮我改改?要求是：You have read an article in a magazine which states,“Economic development will inevitably generate industrial waste which in turn will cause pollution to the living environment.Economic prosperit

我写了篇英语作文,谁帮我改改?要求是：You have read an article in a magazine which states,“Economic development will inevitably generate industrial waste which in turn will cause pollution to the living environment.Economic prosperit
我写了篇英语作文,谁帮我改改?要求是：You have read an article in a magazine which states,
“Economic development will inevitably generate industrial waste which in turn will cause pollution to the living environment.Economic prosperity and a clean environment can not coexist.You have to make a choice between the two.”
Write an article for the same magazine to clarify your own points of view towards this issue.You should use your own ideas,knowledge or experience to generate support for your argument and include an example.
You should write no less than 250 words.
我的作文：
Dear editor:
I have read an article in your magazine which states,"Economic development will inevitably generate industrial waste which in turn will cause pollution to the living environment.Economic prosperity and a clean environment can not coexist.You have to make choice between the two."
However,I am not quite agree with this statement.In my opinion,economic prosperity and a clean environment could coexist.As we know,in Singapore,which country has a good economic prosperity,still has a clean environment too.Their government pays great attention to the pollution problem.The one who dare to generate industrial waste to the river or sea with no re-cleaning treatment will be punished seriously and fined a lot of money,even put in to prison.So no one dare to do so.Let alone,the heavy tax on the pollution industry.
Responded to the country to develop a service-oriented tertiary industry,such as tourism,catering industry.This can do good to our economic prosperity,also improve the incomes of the people.The tax payer's money will be used to deal with the environment pollution,to build more waste treatment plants.Government should guide investor to build less or even no polluted factories.I think this will help a lot to improve the environment we now living.So the economic prosperity and clean environment coexist problem can be fixed.If we did all this good enough,we don't have to "make choice between the two",we choice them both!
Best regards!
Yours sincerely.
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我写了篇英语作文,谁帮我改改?要求是：You have read an article in a magazine which states,“Economic development will inevitably generate industrial waste which in turn will cause pollution to the living environment.Economic prosperit
Dear editor:
I have read an article in your magazine which states,” Economic development will inevitably generate industrial waste which in turn will cause pollution to the living environment.Economic prosperity and a clean environment cannot coexist.You have to make choice between the two."
However,I do not quite agree with this statement.In my opinion,economic prosperity and a clean environment can coexist.As we know,in Singapore,the country has economic prosperity,as well a clean environment.The government made great efforts towards pollution problems.Any individuals or a company let entreated industrial waste pollute the river or sea will get heavily punished,the punishment includes fine of large sum of money even imprisonment.There is also a tax implemented to the industries which generate pollutions,
Government should guide investor to build less or even no polluted factories.There should be more encouragement of developing service-oriented tertiary industry,such as tourism,catering industry etc.The country should also develop new industry of clean energy,such as solar,wind and hydropower,electric car manufacture and so on.This can do well to our economic prosperity; also improve the incomes of the people.Therefore more money can be used to deal with the environment pollution,such as building more waste treatment plants.I think this will help a lot to improve the environment we now living.So the economic prosperity and clean environment can coexist .We don't have to "make choice between the two”.We have both.
Best regards!
Yours sincerely.

“Economic development will inevitably generate industrial waste which in turn will cause pollution to the living environment. Economic prosperity and a clean environment can not coexist. You have to m...

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“Economic development will inevitably generate industrial waste which in turn will cause pollution to the living environment. Economic prosperity and a clean environment can not coexist. You have to make a choice between the two.”
Write an article for the same magazine to clarify your own points of view towards this issue. You should use your own ideas, knowledge or experience to generate support for your argument and include an example.
You should write no less than 250 words.
我的作文：
Dear editor:
I have read an article in your magazine which states,"Economic development will inevitably generate industrial waste which in turn will cause pollution to the living environment. Economic prosperity and a clean environment can not coexist. You have to make choice between the two."
However, I am not quite agree with this statement. In my opinion, economic prosperity and a clean environment could coexist. As we know, in Singapore, which country has a good economic prosperity, still has a clean environment too. Their government pays great attention to the pollution problem. The one who dare to generate industrial waste to the river or sea with no re-cleaning treatment will be punished seriously and fined a lot of money,even put in to prison. So no one dare to do so. Let alone, the heavy tax on the pollution industry.
Responded to the country to develop a service-oriented tertiary industry, such as tourism,catering industry. This can do good to our economic prosperity, also improve the incomes of the people. The tax payer's money will be used to deal with the environment pollution, to build more waste treatment plants. Government should guide investor to build less or even no polluted factories. I think this will help a lot to improve the environment we now living. So the economic prosperity and clean environment coexist problem can be fixed. If we did all this good enough, we don't have to "make choice between the two", we choice them both!
Best regards!
Yours sincerely.

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Well done,my friend! The examples of Singapore and service-oriented tertiary industry play a vital important role in elustrating your point "economic prosperity and a clean environment could coexist"...

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Well done,my friend! The examples of Singapore and service-oriented tertiary industry play a vital important role in elustrating your point "economic prosperity and a clean environment could coexist". Howerve , if you can pay attention to some details such as "put into"not "put in to", your essay may be better. What's more , "Best wishes "or other “beautiful wishes” may be proper in the end of a letter. Last but not least ,you are supposed to reduce the part of your first paragraph, which you have adapted too much from the magzine.
That 's all, only for reference,thank you

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