高中大学英语水平进,Keep your goal in mind Each river has its own direction,I think every student must has his goal .To some degree,a goal determines your success in the future.People who have a great goal can probably acquire a big success i

高中大学英语水平进,Keep your goal in mind Each river has its own direction,I think every student must has his goal .To some degree,a goal determines your success in the future.People who have a great goal can probably acquire a big success i
高中大学英语水平进,
Keep your goal in mind Each river has its own direction,I think every student must has his goal .To some degree,a goal determines your success in the future.People who have a great goal can probably acquire a big success in his future,while the people who have a small goal may gain a small one.Meanwhile,the time we set our goals is another important factor.The earlier we have our goals,the more easily we can reach them.Therefore,it's of great importance to set a great goal when we are very young.Hower,having a goal doesn't mean we can succeed in no time.We still have a long way to go.The next step we should take is to put our goals into action.Maybe we meet with many difficulties,we mustn't stop or give up.We should keep on going,struggling against all kinds of trouble or problems until our goals are hit!
Think about it,your first dream,and now can remember Mody?
A long game,a long time and not up friends,
Is not to their own goals and dreams are left behind out?
Think about it,now what are the reasons not try?
Is not inert in the heart trouble,so you will little by little the disappearance of
So how to do it?This is not only to continue to degenerate?
If someone on your block progress on the road,he kicked aside,
If someone dares to laugh at you,beat him and let him know your great,
If there is no way forward to overcome the difficulties,just Liang Jian greeted
Wins,to move forward and lost,continued to fight until death!
Constantly repeating their goals,non-stop to the struggle to transcend,to struggle,to fight!
Make a real strong man!
Do you know who you are!
You have to achievements themselves,the achievements of China,the achievements of the people!
一篇英语作文,请求高手帮忙修改其语法错误及删除不好的句子,越多越好

高中大学英语水平进,Keep your goal in mind Each river has its own direction,I think every student must has his goal .To some degree,a goal determines your success in the future.People who have a great goal can probably acquire a big success i
修改后的,你适当借鉴一下吧,我认为我的英语还行吧,四级作文有227分.有一些改过的地方我没加汉语说明）Keep your goals in mind
Each river has its own direction（这是汉语翻译的吧,英语里没有这句谚语的吧,最好换个别的,但我又想不出类似的）,and(两句之间要加连词）I think every individual(从下文看不局限于学生） should(用must太强迫了） have(不是has) his goal .
To some degree,a goal determines wether you can succeed(应该表达出能够成功） in the future.People who have a great goal can probably acquire a huge(不是big) success in the future,while people who have a small goal may gain a small one.Meanwhile,the time we set our goals is another important factor.The earlier we have our goals,the more easily we can reach them.(意思不大对吧,越早设立目标就越容易达到,好像逻辑上不大对,早设立的目标也可能很难达到,你自己再换个意思吧）Therefore,it's of vital（这个比great高档一些啦) importance to set a ambitious(多换点词,学会一个意思用好多词表达） goal when we are very young.
Hower,having a goal doesn't mean we can succeed in no time.We still have a long way to go.The next step we should take is to put our goals into action.（这一句很好,很地道）It is possible that we meet with many difficulties,but we should never stop or give up.(你看这句改成这样是不是通顺多了）We are supposed to (还是多换词语和句型）keep on going,struggling against all kinds of troubles or problems until our goals are reached.
Think about it, your first dream, and now can remember Mody?(从这句开始很突然,转变的太快,下面这些应该不是你自己写的吧,和上面的风格迥异,Mody 是什么呀）
A long game,(一场很长的游戏?） a long time and not up friends,
Is not to their own goals and dreams are left behind out?
Think about it, now what are the reasons not try?
Is not inert in the heart trouble, so you will little by little the disappearance of
So how to do it? This is not only to continue to degenerate?
If someone on your block progress on the road, he kicked aside,
If someone dares to laugh at you, beat him and let him know your great,
If there is no way forward to overcome the difficulties, just Liang Jian greeted
Wins, to move forward and lost, continued to fight until death!
Constantly repeating their goals, non-stop to the struggle to transcend, to struggle, to fight!
Make a real strong man!
Do you know who you are!
You have to achievements themselves, the achievements of China, the achievements of the people!
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Think about it, your first dream, and now can remember Mody开始到最后全部删掉,都是一些又难理解又空洞的所谓的经典句子,我不知道这是一篇考试作文还是你自己感兴趣写的,如果是考试作文我建议在阐明了目标的重要性后举几个名人的例子,比如周恩来这些从小有大志的人的例子,这样文章内容充实一些,还可以举自己学习英语或其他什么事的小例子,贴近生活.
我觉得总体你写的还行,词汇量不够,重复使用的较多,句型变化有些少,结构不够清晰,后面部分都是空话,没有实际意义的.
只要多掌握词汇,在句型上有意安排几个从句呀,倒装呀谚语呀就会好很多的,比如：
Where there is a will there is a way.
Not only should we set a goal,but we also spare mo effort to achieve it;
总之写作水平一般啦,不要伤心奥,还需多努力呀

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Each river has its own direction,and each student should have(SHOULD 后面原型) his/her (性别歧视？) goal.（I think就算了，写出来不好看，也是空话，现在就对称了）To some degree,a goal determines if you can succeed in the future(你写的拗口)....

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Each river has its own direction,and each student should have(SHOULD 后面原型) his/her (性别歧视？) goal.（I think就算了，写出来不好看，也是空话，现在就对称了）To some degree,a goal determines if you can succeed in the future(你写的拗口).People who have a great goal can probably acquire a huge（good） success in their（前面是PEOPLE，用复数） future；on contrast(相反的), people who have a small goal may gain a small one.(Meanwhile,the time we set our goals is another important factor.除去，不合逻辑啊，你自己想)
If we set a goal, we not only should set a big goal,but also should realize our goal as early as possible.(加这句，有承上启下的作用)
改不下去了，需要休息···

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