请大哥哥大姐姐指导下英语作文.Impression of after-reading---A girl,at the age of 15,was infected with a terrible disease.At first,her mother was afraid of telling her truth that this kind of disease didn’t have any medicine to help,mea

请大哥哥大姐姐指导下英语作文.Impression of after-reading---A girl,at the age of 15,was infected with a terrible disease.At first,her mother was afraid of telling her truth that this kind of disease didn’t have any medicine to help,mea
请大哥哥大姐姐指导下英语作文.
Impression of after-reading---
A girl,at the age of 15,was infected with a terrible disease.At first,her mother was afraid of telling her truth that this kind of disease didn’t have any medicine to help,meaning it could not cure.From day to day,the girl’s body began to lose balance,and then she even could not walk any more.Gradually,she realized the truth.Whereas,instead of giving up,she began to keep a diary to write down her thinking,she insisted on doing it everyday.
In her diary,she wrote down the battle against the disease during the past decade.She was aware of living is beautiful,what is more,her courage and confidence moved many patients who had the same disease with her.
Despite all the efforts from her doctor,her parents and herself in the battle against the disease,the serious illness swallowed her body gradually.At last,she could not move and only can stay at the wheelchair.
A disaster makes us brave.I have learned how to face reality instead of escaping from it.In our lives,no matter how terrible a problem is,we have to face.Remembering of her courage and confidence makes my body excited.Especially her diary moved me deeply from which I see an optimistic girl.I believe as long as you strengthen your dream,it will come true eventually.
哪些句子可以写得再好一点,英语作文怎么才写得让人欣赏啊,考英语4级作文有点难度啊,

请大哥哥大姐姐指导下英语作文.Impression of after-reading---A girl,at the age of 15,was infected with a terrible disease.At first,her mother was afraid of telling her truth that this kind of disease didn’t have any medicine to help,mea
A reflective response to “A Diary with Tears”
A girl,at the age of 15,was infected with a terrible disease.At first,her mother was reluctant to tell her the truth that there wasn’t any medicine for this kind of disease,which meant it was incurable.As time passed by,the girl’s body began to lose balance,and eventually the ability to walk.She finally came to realize the truth.Instead of giving up,she began to write down her thoughts in a diary; she insisted on doing it everyday.In her diary,she described the battles against the disease over a course of a decade.She found that life was beautiful; moreover,her courage and confidence also moved many patients who were afflicted with the same disease.
Despite all the efforts made by her doctor,who joined her and her parents in the battle against the disease,the debilitating illness made her become immobile and entirely wheelchair-bound.
Misfortunes make people brave.I have learnt to face reality instead of trying to escape from it.In our life,no matter how terrible a problem is,we have to face it.Thinking of her courage and confidence makes me exhilarated.I am especially touched by her diary,in which I see an optimistic girl.I believe as long as our dream remains alive,it will come true eventually.

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A girl, at the age of 15, was infected with a terrible disease. At first, her mother was afraid of telling her thev] truth that there was no me...

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Impression of after-reading---<>
A girl, at the age of 15, was infected with a terrible disease. At first, her mother was afraid of telling her thev] truth that there was no medicine could help her.
Later, she began to lose her balance, and then she even could not walk any more. Someday,she finally realized that she could not walk anymore. Whereas, instead of giving up, she began to keep a diary to write down her thinking, she insisted on doing it everyday.
In her diary, she wrote down the battle against the disease during the past decade. She was aware of living is beautiful, what is more, her courage and confidence moved many patients who had the same disease with her.
Despite all the efforts from her doctor, her parents and herself in the battle against the disease, the serious illness swallowed her body gradually. At last, she could not move and only can stay in the wheelchair.
A disaster makes us brave. I have learned how to face reality instead of escaping from it. In our lives, no matter how terrible a problem is, we have to face. Remembering of her courage and confidence makes my body excited. Especially her diary moved me deeply from which I see an optimistic girl. I believe as long as you strengthen your dream, it will come true eventually.
我有点改不下去了...只改了第一段...勇气很不错,写这样的文章,不过建议不要直接翻译中文书上的...还一句一句地翻.把你想说的写下来就好.

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感觉句子很中文化，不地道。建议LZ多去读下或者背背好的文章，比如选自Times或者National geographic的文章自然就会写的不错啦。毕竟作文是个输入与输出的问题，没有输入怎么输出呢？
虽然很多时候记住语法，比如要在作文一面用倒装，强调，同位语之类的，但是没有看过老美的文章自己表达出来就是别扭的。
再说，四级作文是个中国人想出来考中国人的东西，如果按照它的要求来写平时的...

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感觉句子很中文化，不地道。建议LZ多去读下或者背背好的文章，比如选自Times或者National geographic的文章自然就会写的不错啦。毕竟作文是个输入与输出的问题，没有输入怎么输出呢？
虽然很多时候记住语法，比如要在作文一面用倒装，强调，同位语之类的，但是没有看过老美的文章自己表达出来就是别扭的。
再说，四级作文是个中国人想出来考中国人的东西，如果按照它的要求来写平时的随感，科技文之类的，那就完了，毕竟这是个应试的东西，写出来的东西是绝对不会让人欣赏的。

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